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defendthelegend
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Mon Jul 27, 2009 12:52 pm
defendthelegend says... · Mon Jul 27, 2009 12:52 pm
yeah, the title fits in really well. you don't need to change it at all.

plus don't forget that yours is better, and will always be :D

no, but seriously keep the title waves!
I wrote your name in the sand and the sea washed it away! I wrote your name in my heart and there it will stay.




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babygirl12
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Thu Dec 31, 2009 10:32 pm
babygirl12 says... · Thu Dec 31, 2009 10:32 pm
Its really good..:)
keep up the good work..
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iamjemo
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Thu Jun 10, 2010 3:25 am
iamjemo says... · Thu Jun 10, 2010 3:25 am
I agree with Aqua. :-P
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allikat98
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Tue Dec 14, 2010 12:42 am
allikat98 says... · Tue Dec 14, 2010 12:42 am
AWESOMENESS! There are a few grammer issues, ones which have been mentioned in earlier replies (☻). I loved the reptition and how it all seemed to connect back to the Beach. How you described the waves was amazing, and I loved the metaphors you used. The last stanza was kind of weird, but in a good way, like I've never really thought about waves like that poetically before. Overall, it was amazing. I ♥♥♥ it! ♦allikat98♦
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