Luna. My rendition.

I know her hair has grey in it, her left eye is crooked, and nose too round; but, is there anything else I could do to improve it? Please excuse my terrible drawing skills. I used to be better; and after a year of not drawing, I decided to try to hone my skills again.

Hello,

I'll give you a review today.

First off it is very large... can you possibly shrink it??? Also the sketch it'self is very pale in that the lines are not dark enough and it is very hard to see. With that all said, here we go...

Using a sausage head model will help with making sure all parts are in their right places. The shape of her head is off and some of her facial features or parts are out of proportion and not quite in their proper place. Her eyes are not fully in the center of her face but they are close.

Her neck is too long (maybe too cylindrical) and shoulders seem slightly wilted but don't make them too stiff. Speaking of stiff her hair doesn't seem to have much movement.

Shading will also is greatly needed. Shading is almost a basic necessity in drawing and sketching.

Hope this helped, this is a good start!

Keep it up.

Thanks for the review! That helps alot!

MJ

Okay, i'm sorry but i'm going to be bit harsh. cover your ears if you wish...
her head is great. her torso is great.the picture overall is...HUGE!!!!!!
try using paint and resize it. oh and a few more things. no ones eyes are on their forehead. you need to lower the eyes so that they're in the middle. i know is sounds wierd, but its true.
If you have anymore questions or you would like to complain, Please PM me...i know what i'm talking about.
Skittles

I like it but the eyes are too far up on the forehead. And yeah, you should shrink it. I personally think her hair should have less gray and yellow and more brown. I love brown hair. Great job, anyways. (Her eyebrows are way too yellow also!)

Hello there,

First thing's first. Proportions.
One of drawing's most difficult tasks to tackle.
When I first saw this, I was like like, hmm the forehead is small and the eyes are big.
unless that's what you're going for[?].
Anyway,here a few links that may help you in tackling proportions.
1.http://buktopgicha.deviantart.com/art/Female-Face-proportions-111245731
2. a little "cartoonish" but still good:http://alexds1.deviantart.com/art/Face-Tutorial-109889834

hopefully those help =]
keep up the good work.
Remember, practice makes perfect!

~Pink

Thanks for all of the reviews! I haven't checked this in awhile. When I get the time, I'll redraw her and try to figure out how to make it smaller. But in the meantime, I'll be using the tips y'all gave me to map out how she should look!

MJ