Because - Chap. 29

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“No, I don’t mind coming down here, Beca. Don’t get the wrong idea. I haven’t seen you in… what’s it been now?”

I believe you are missing a C.

“Oh, you bet. You’re new in town. These girls haven’t seen a new guy in months. You’ll be like a new flavor of ice cream.”

There is nothing wrong here. I just thought that I would point out that it made me laugh.


Other than the missing C in Becca's name, I could not find anything else that needed fixing. Honestly, I can't even describe how happy I was when I saw you had posted two new chapters of this story. For the past few months, I have been silently reading stories on YWS, yours and Ashleylee's, but no longer posting on them. I don't know why I stopped. Most likely because your writing is just so flawless as it is that I felt you needed no help from me. But with the posting of these chapters, I have decided to come back. Enough about that. Though this wasn't one of my favorite chapters, it was still very well written. I hate the fact that Vick just ignores Becca now. Oh, gosh. It kills me inside.

Anyway, great chapter. Please continue posting new chapters. This story is one of the very few stories that keeps me logging on to YWS.

-Venom

Hello again!

Well, I didn't find anything to nitpick over in this chapter. It's always sad to hear that Becca and Vick's relationship isn't working out. I hope to hear more about him soon, by the way. And Becca's voice is consistent and this story as a whole is well written, though I'm sure you know that or you should because it is true!

PM me if/when you post more.

Keep writing,

~Angel

*gold star*

Hey, KJ!

After I read both of your new chapters, there was only one thought going through my head:
"Ahhhh!"

Thanks. Now I have to read it again so I can come up with somthing intelligent to say.

Okay, here's something: Vick. His reaction was competely in character. I don't like it any more than Becca does, but it fits him very nicely. I also thought the change in James was a nice note. Of course he would be different now. And now, your alternating chapters have met. It's coming to the moment we've all been waiting for.

I'm not sure if I could survive waiting another few months for another chapter.

Thanks for another amazing read! I couldn't find anything to change!
--Anna