My Life ( Heavy Metal)

Liberate my life!!! X 4
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Got to save myself
From my wallet
From my goddamn gun!
I am kicking my self in pain
Let’s buy some more cocaine!
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Fire on my head...
What a life, what a shity crap!
I waste my life...´
It will be wasted away!!!

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I don’t give shit
About it a little bit
Can somebody save me?
I got so soft I forgot
That this is life!

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My life is made of pity
I cry when I watch Sex and the City!
My favorite is Samantha!
God, can I get a life?!
Can I get a life?
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A man pasts by....
Not much to say?
Makes me wonder if my life is okay?
My life pasts by, it turns into ash!
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I don’t give shit
About it a little bit
Can somebody save me?
I got so soft I forgot
That this is life!
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No, I cant take this anymore
No, because this isn’t natural
Smoking, drinking, sniffing
My life is locked away in a cage
(Slow melodic guitar solo)
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I can’t live like this anymore… X2
I feel like I can’t stop this anymore…X2
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If I want to change my life I am going to have to….
Liberate my life!!! X 4

First off, high fives for metal. *high fives* Yeah, corny, but whatever. ^^

Okay, this immediately reminded me of Hail to the Geek by Deaf Pedestrian with your references to Sex and the City. (by the way, remember to capitalize titles when you write. You forgot here.) At the same time, this almost feels like something that you would hear from a band like Anti-Flag or Strike Anywhere.

Also, I figured I should mention the title, I’m not so sure that I like it that well. Something about it seems rather blah. Find something with a little more meaning. Obviously, “Liberate My Life” is a powerful line in the song, but sometimes that just kills a song. Be creative. That’s the meaning of music.

If you have any questions, just PM me. I won’t mind.

~lilymoore

Wow, Gluz.

Quite interesting song here. I like your talent for writing heavy metal but--

I think this song is all over the place a bit in the sense that the rhyming lines are scattered. We want to focus on one aspect of this, but we can't. It's a bit hard to when you have lines that don't really connect, Gluz. It would be ideal to focus on meaning, but when you have rhyme as your main achievement here, it's a really hard thing to focus on, dear.

For instance! some of these lines are contributing important information. Instead, they end with lines that rhyme with another, and that's the only kick we're getting out of this.

I would say focus on the song and what it means rather than rhyme.

Keep writing

June

I did some little changes

I really enjoyed this. I would totally listen to this song. the lyrics kind of made me think of some of Nickelback's deeper songs ( If you don't like Nickelback, It's not and insult. I consider it a good thing) As for rhyming, songs don't necisarly have to rhyme to sond good. Especially metal songs. So don't orry about it. Anyway, I would love to hear this song someday, I love songs like this and hope to see more of your lyrics.

the lyrics kind of made me think of some of Nickelback's deeper songs ( If you don't like Nickelback, It's not and insult. I consider it a good thing)

I like Nickelback!!! But this song is more heavyish. Nickelback is like Hard Rock but I wanted this to be more like metal.

yeah i got that, i don't think the music will be like Nickelback.Just the lyrics made me think of them.