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Shovel for Fall

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Right arm too long (her right not ours)
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Sweet. As you said one arm does look larger than the other, but it is still pretty good. Also I am not too sure on the shoes. Maybe they are too small or something.

Apart from that... Nice work - as usual.




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Both arms look fine to me unless I'm not seeing something..?

The right shoe (our right) is a bit wrong and they do look quite big.

Nice work though.
In all the time we have
There is never enough time
To show what is in our heart.




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i like this, it reminds me of a close friends style.
i agree about the arm and the shoes... but a lot better than i could ever do, congrats.
"Give me my Romeo; and, when he shall die,
Take him and cut him out in little stars,
And he will make the face of heaven so fine
That all the world will be in love with night
And pay no worship to the garish sun."




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I also agree about the arms and shoes, but I really like the sketchy look of it. :)
I love the clothes and the shovel. :P
So yeah...this is really good!
Cheers,
Ayra
everything i loved
became everything i lost.


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