Thanks But No Thanks

Thanks, But No Thanks

Sanding in the rain
Thinking something’s going change
I don’t where
I don’t how
I don’t why
I fly’s right bye

CHORUS
Running in the rain
Thinking something’s going change
I don’t know you
I don’t know me
But can’t you see
This is meant to be
You ask me a question
And have to say no
But I really what to go
Thanks, But No Thanks
I’ll be fine
Thanks, But No Thanks
I see the sign

Always thinking something else
Should‘ve known you were only for your self
Walk away in rain
Start to run
feel the pain

CHORUS

Don’t look back
Keep on running
Don’t attack
Keep on stunning
Your love

CHORUS X2

123THE8THWONDER wrote:I fly’s right bye

Huh? 'Fly's'? 'I fly right by' I think might be better.

123THE8THWONDER wrote:Don’t look back
Keep on running
Don’t attack
Keep on stunning
Your love

Rhyme/Rhythm:
It felt a little rhymey rhymey, but it wasn't that bad. None of the rhymes felt super forced to me, but some, (especially in the chorus) felt a little pushed. (If that makes sense )
I thought the rhythm was really good. I could really hear the song in my head as I was going along so nice job with that!

Topic/Overall:
I don't have much to say here. I thought you presented the topic in a good fashion, it didn't feel super cliche to me and overall I thought you did a nice job

-Carly

I think it is good
but very repetitive some of the wording is also not quite there yet.
But it has potential to be amazing
but it's your chorus and first verse





Emily