Two Lovers

Haha, well, this is my first post here in Art and Photography.
Sorry for the bad quality of the picture... the only way I could possibly post this was if I took a picture with my webcam and did it through there since I have no scanner.
A few things:

There is no shading whatsoever. I cannot shade to save my life. =P
The hands are horrible, I know. =/ I also cannot to hands to save my life.

But! I would very much like to know how I can improve this, so...
Tear it apart. =D

Hello,
I think that you did well good job.

One way to learn how to shade is to start by drawing a ball in the middle of the page.

Then, in the corner of the page, draw a light bulb (this will be your light source).

Next, start with the part of the ball that is the farthest from the light source. This should be the darkest part (Where you will have the most pressure on the paper).

From there, move closer to the light source. As you move closer, release some of that pressure. This should create a lighter shade.

Keep going till there isn't any pressure and there is a white part on the ball. (the closest to the light source)

Once you get this down, you can advance on.

Its a good way to start.

I hope it made sense

Good picture

Ok, I am going to review this for you. First of all I do like this I can't draw people kissing.

Anyway what I noticed is that one, her arm is really long. If you pull it down on his head a little it would make it look better.

Second, their hair is really stiff. If you made it more um, flexible it would look grate. I do like the guys hair if it was just a little more like falling in his face or something.

Third, I think that them not touching kinda throws it off. If they were really close like all over him close haha.

The only other thing is as you said the hands. I think they are really hard to draw as well. The thing I learned is to go finger by finger. It's not hard once you learn how fingers grasp. If you look at your own hand it might help.

I like their clothes, and mouths.

Anyway that's all I got haha. I hope I helped.

Keep Drawing

-Flower-

Hi. I think you did a preety good drawing. The proportions are good over all but i got some few minor pointers:

Usually the upper arm is the same lengh as the forearm. The arms look a little stiff too. Try to make them with more curves the next time.

His eyes are inclined to much downward.

And if you want to shade start at the border of the lines of the object inward slightly with a pencil. Then smudge softly with a difuminator or your finger.

So hope its helpfull.

Hello, you're a really great artist, I can't draw anything at all...

But anyways, back to your piece. I liked it.

I would like to actually see their lips, you know?

Also shade isn't always needed, your piece is just quite fine without

The hands are okay, as you mentioned already

Everything's proportional except her arm, I'm sorry, but it's just too long. -_-

I wish you cropped your hand out of the picture, though. Otherwise it was pretty good.

Nice job,
Ryan

It's really good! You've got talent.

Hey there Phantom!
I saw you name there, and that you drew a picture and I was like all over it. xD
You are telling me to rip it to shred so I will. ;3
Not that it is bad or anything, it is actually excellent, but there is always need for improvement.
Let us begin! Time to graffiti your work.



First off, I would like you to note that I trimmed the drawing to the main focus is actually on the picture. That helps when you take a camera picture because it also makes it seems less camera-ey. xD
When it is a camera picture there is a lot of things outside the drawing that can distract the viewer, and wouldn't you rather have them looking at your work rather then your hand on the bottom corner of the picture?

Point One:
My first point is about the lack of creases in the pants. The reason why creases are vital is because they make it more realistic and add detail to the drawing. You want the viewer to think 'Wow, that's amazing' when they see it. One way to make them do that is have either shading (which I will help you on later) or adding details to make it look as realistic as possible. If you look at someones pants, you will notice how many creases there are, unless of course they are really tight jeans. The creases are also always there where the leg isn't their to support the full structure of the pants.

Just add a couple lines here and there, make the pants seem less stiff. You did some creases in the shirt which were pretty good. Just draw them where ever you think they fit, and if they don't actually fit, you will only get a comment on it by some freak like me who pays attention to every single detail in drawings. xD

Point Two:
Point Two may seem like I am pointing to the same place as Point One, well I ain't. Point Two is about that leg in general, minus the detail about the creases. If you look at the leg, it looks like it has a minor deformity that makes you really start thinking, that doesn't look quite right. If you compare this leg to the other leg, the difference is quite noticeable in size.

I would recommend trimming it down to almost mirror the other leg, but make sure he doesn't seem too stiff with the leg. You can almost actually make the leg follow the angle of the torso. That way, it gives the illusion that he is leaning in even more because of the lust and desire. Steamy Steamy. xD

Point Three:
I am here to comment on the creases on the stomach and the area around it. This creases are actually in a perfect position and place greatly. The only problem is that they look so stiff. Might I recommend curving some of them where it is appropriate or drawing them lighter with your pencil.

The next comment is on the back and the clothing on the man. It has settled itself perfectly, following every line of the body. You may not have noticed but with clothing, because it is such a fickle thing rarely does that unless the shirt is incredibly restricting. The clothing will fold over itself in some places. Clothing isn't made just for us, (Unless it was tailored) and especially because you gave the illusion of baggy on the one part, I would just add some minor wavers or folds along his back.

Point Four:
This may sound awkward, but the next area I am going to be talking about is that girls butt area. The way you have drawn it makes it look like she is bending into him, which is okay and everything, but the muscles in the but release them, making the butt not as toned or flat as it in this case. Give her some more booty back there.

The lines where I think you made to symbolize the end of the butt doesn't work because it makes her butt seem much smaller. Ones I get into telling you about shading, you will realize how you can make that but seem voluptuous with using shading and the shading doesn't make it seem small like the lines.

Another part is that the pockets are actually to high. If you look at the back of jeans they are quite lower sometimes even low enough to pass the end of the butt. You also made the line on the side of the pants turn to suddenly. It makes you kind of wonder when you see it. Make the curve more subtle and gentle. It still ceases to amaze me though how well you did on proportions.

Point Five:
Now because you said you were bad at hands I am going to help you out here moderately. I still have not mastered hands yet, and I am surely not close to have done so, but take the time to look at your own hand. Do you notice how the fingers are either the same or almost as big as the palm? That is one thing you should know about, or else your hands will seem incredibly stubby.

Now another thing I have as a tip for hands is that can you see the knobby roundish joints in your hand? Those can actually be used as a frame for drawing hands. All you have to do is draw the circles in the right places then draw around it, and it will most likely make a right proportioned hand.
This is my example, laugh now;

I did this on a laptop weird mouse sliding thing on paint. I think it is pretty good. xD
You get the gist of it right?

You should practice drawing hands just full front on, on their own, or get reference images of hands. That way you can practice until you are comfortable with their messed up proportions, then you can start drawing the weird position of anything that you may want.

Point Seven:
You did a nice job with the hair, but all I would say is to loosen it up a bit and maybe add more details that way it would seem more eye-catching and realistic. The reason why I say that is because right now it just seems so stiff. Instead of pointing out the edges so pointy like you did, try make them curved in a bit more, or with the hair. That way I believe it will follow the rules of actual gravity laws. xD

If this was indeed a drawing of anime, I would still add a lot more detail, but for the hair, you can stick it out which ever way you want.

Point Eight:
With this guys hair, I believe you should make it more flexible like the other girls and maybe try to make it more into the face to follow gravity. He seems to be taller, and all over her, so when his head is stooped like that, the hair should actually fall into the face more. I know that might mean covering up some facial features, but it also makes the drawing seem more passionate because it shows that he wants to be there, and never wants to let her go instead of always maintaining the perfect hair. Catch my drift?

Proportions:
I am fairly amazed at how well you drew the proportions, yet they are kind of off. You can never get past that one. xD
What I believe you should do for proportions is to get one of those wooden dolls that you can move them into different positions. Those models actually help you with proportions and they also help you actually get humanly possible movements. I find they can be extremely helpful.

Might I also suggest looking into some anatomy books and study the shape and size of the human body. That way you can get the exact proportions and it would look fantastic. I find those books can be so helpful at times. Using the books can also relate to anime if you decide to turn their because with the anime proportions seem to mirror the realism proportions except for some minor details like how they will become skinnier, busier, and more curvaceous depending on what anime you may watch.

Shading:
It seems you have said you couldn't shade at all. I recommend what one of the other reviewers said by using the ball with the light. One thing to remember when shading a drawing is that you have one consistent light source. That means that everything away from the light source is darker and everything closer is light. It can get confusing at some points as to where you have to shade. But shading is basically compiling different tones together to make something as realistic as it can be, to make it seem almost three dimensional.

For an example of some nice shading take a look at The.Dreamwalker's A Geisha Girl. It was beautifully shaded, and the light source is coming from right in front of her and a bit to the left. That was beautifully shaded.

Overall
You have a great way of drawing and I believe you will certainly become an accomplished artist. I do hope to see more over your arts. Just work on those few minor details, and I believe you will become something beyond words.
Good Luck!
~Incognito

P.S. I think the arms are fine.

Hey!
Really good attempt but the girls head is a bit too 'forced into a very uncomfortable position'.
With this taken into account, you will improve.
You have a talent, keep at it!

xx