I like this, it would look better with a little bit of color and shading, but besides that it's good. There are a couple of errors but every drawing has those so.
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.
Hey there! I saw the awesome name 'Starlight Requim' and was like, 'Hm, what's over here?'
So, now for the small review.
You ... are amazing ... at anime. Let me tell you, this is awesome. You can draw their bodies and hands really great, which is awesome. I can usually only draw the head of something.
Only a few little nitpicks;
I noticed basically that the guy in the front left seems like his head is jutting out a bit too much. I think his head needs to be turned under a bit, if you get what I'm saying.
OVERALL: Great job! You're awesome at anime!
"Man is least himself when he talks in his own person.
Hello there!
I see you have a really good drawing here. There are somethings you will need to fix up and that is why I am here, to help you figure out what you did wrong. ;3
Let us begin!
Point One: First things first is the length of the fore-arms. They indeed have to be longer. At this point in time, they seem incredibly short. With anime, you have to be careful because it relates a lot of realism and the realistic proportions but with minor changes. In anime, they always have enlongated arms and legs anyways, so that means that because your arm is to short for realism, it will be too short for anime.
The second part of point on is the actual hands. Hands are the things that most people have trouble with including myself. You did fairly well here with them, but there is a few things you did wrong. First of, they are way to small. Most people draw the hands increasinly small but they don't actually know that the hand is supposed to be the size of the face. I would recommend you resizing your hands and making them bigger and making the plump fingers a little more elegant.
Secondly, the first hand is way out of whack. It seems the hand is amost flipped with the thumb on the wrong side. I think you were actually trying to make the thumb curve in. Well you actually made it curve into too much. That means that you will have to fix that hand overall and remember to keep the fingers enlogated and thin.
Point Two: Point two is me commenting on her lack of arm. Due to her positioning with her other arm also, there should be notification on the one side where the arm should be. I would include that, that way you can actually make better sense of the drawing.
Point Three: This is going to sound awkward, but your drew her second boob to small. It makes it looke increasingly in even and less neat. It takes away from the drawing. Just even it out and make sure it is even with the other one, that way it will look a lot better.
I also think you did well here with the clothing creases and such. I was actually really surprised. Good job.
Point Four: The mouth on this girl is a bit off. And I don't really necessarily like it. It is really crooked at this point in time.
What I would suggest is just to make it into a closed mouth. When I started drawing, I would always have their mouths open with that stupid smile, but if you noticed almost all the girls have their mouths open. You make it even I would just make it closed. And when making a close mouth in anime, there is also a really neat way to do it.
What you do is make sure there is a break around in the middle. That way it gives the appearance of a fuller face and a bit more realistic smile because you don't actually have that huge black line across your face signifying your mouth. I think you should try it some time and see how it works for you.
Point Five: My fifth point has to say that your eyes are really far apart and not level with each other. I know she is slightly leaning forward, but the problem is that you actually made the eye striaght up while lower and that can make it look unprofessional and unneat.
Now with the eyes too far apart, I recommend listening to what they actually do for realism. In between the two eyes, there is the spacing to fit one more realism eye. I believe that would work with anime too, even though my anime style has now reverted into something inbetween. xD
That what happens when you study two things at the same time. It just doesn't turn out and they start to blend together.
What I also noticed with your whole entire picture was that everyone is looking at something different. Usually in a group drawing people make the eyes look at the screen or at one person who is doing something different. That way it draws the attention into one spot, not into many. At this moment in time, it seems that they are all staring off into space thinking about their own funny thoughts and groups of people don't necessarily do that.
Make your people human, make them have different reactions and actions and try not to make them all have the same face. I believe that you can become quite an accomplished artist if you do.
Point Six: The problem here at point six is just mainly that your jaw is out of whack. All your other ones seem to be working great, but at the moment this one takes away from the drawing especially because of where the heair is, it makes it look bigger. I think you can fix that jaw line easily enough.
Point Seven: The only thing I have to say is to add detail to the ear. You have detail to everyone else except this one and it is noticeable, not just to me.
Point Eight: With this guys face, it is difficult for me to say what I don't like about it. It is just something to do with the shape. They eyes are not level again and it is the same with the eyebrows. I think you could also variate the emotion on his face a bit more, make him grinning angry. All you people seem to be having the same kind of emotions and it is slightly befuddling to me.
I also think that the top of his head may be bit a tad bit flat. That is only just a minor thought.
Point Nine: All I have to say here is that the gap inbetween her eyes are too much and her mouth should be on a bit more of a slant to the side to make it look more happy and casual. Not the way you are making it look now.
Overall: Very well done. I believe this is one of the best anime pictures I have seen on here. I am actually mildly suprised. If you just fix up those details, which you don't have to by the way, it would be stunning. Take it from a former person who drew anime, I think I may know what I am doing. xD
I hope to see more of your work.
~Incognito
'Everyone is entitled to be stupid, some just abuse the priviledge.'
Thank you so much everyone. <(^-^)> Especially Incognito Temptation I really appreciate all the detail you went into in you critique it'll help me improve this drawing (and probably a lot of my others) so much. Thanks again everyone, I'll try to post some more up soon.
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