Urban Guerrilla

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We are the urban guerrilla,
The forbidden,
Outlawed
Warriors of the city.
We lack the honor
Of your pomp and circumstance armies.

We hide,
We steal,
We cheat,
We lie.
And we don't care.

We infect
Your clean, pristine cities
And make them our own.

We are
The dirty, abandoned buildings
That mar your pretty skyline.

We are the conmen,
The petty thieves,
So you don't get complacent.
There is no complacency here,
Not for you.

We are the underworld,
The rats,
The roots,
The foot-thick layer of grime
In your sparkling, perfect city.

We are the urban guerrilla
Fighting it out in the streets,
In the alleys,
In the secret Chinatown government.

We undermine your rule,
Taking your skyscrapers
From under your feet.

We're making this city ours -
As if it was ever yours to begin with.
The opposite of war isn't peace! It's creation! -RENT




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Wow I like this, it's kinda dark though. I'm not good with reviews haha, but I don't see anything big wrong with it.


Good Job
Keep Writing

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My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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AudentesFortunaIuvat wrote:We're making this city ours -
As if it was ever yours to begin with.


Should it be: "As if it was never yours to begin with."?

~Meep(:
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Meep(: wrote:
AudentesFortunaIuvat wrote:We're making this city ours -
As if it was ever yours to begin with.


Should it be: "As if it was never yours to begin with."?

~Meep(:


I don't think som I think it was put that way on purpose.
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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It's people like you that make this website worth waiting through the five minutes that it takes to load up. I love it when there're poems in here that I can actually understand...
I think that 'Urban Guerrilla' was great. I love the dark imagery you used- for example,
We are
The dirty, abandoned buildings
That mar your pretty skyline.

I just love your choice of words... the way that you told it straight-up, exactly how it is... brilliant.
As for the argment that was going on... those lines were right the first time.
Awesome job, and keep writing. I can't even find anything to critique.
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Edna began to feel like one who awakens gradually out of a dream, a delicious, grotesque, impossible dream, to feel again the realities pressing into her soul.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening