Just friends

I told you that it couldn’t be.

You weren’t meant for me.

I said you were my best friend.

But you couldn’t be more than that.



I said I wanna be just friends.

I said I don’t think of you that way.

I said our relation shouldn’t end.

Let’s pretend there never was this day.



And I moved on with my happy life.

Didn’t think twice about you.

I curse myself for never bothering

To ever give you a second look.



[Chorus]

Cuz now I am in love with you

And I regret ever telling you

I wanna be just friends.

I wanna be just friends.

Cuz now I am head over heels

And I really really really feel

We should be more than just friends.

We should be more than just friends.



But I guess I’ve lost my chance

That night you asked me to the dance.

And I said “sorry but I got a date,

But you’ll always be my best mate.”



I said I wanna be just friends.

I said I don’t think of you that way.

I said our relation shouldn’t end.

Let’s pretend there never was this day.



And I danced with my date that night,

And didn’t give a slight pause.

Never even gave a single thought

To the damage that I caused.



[Chorus]

But now I am in love with you

And I regret ever telling you

I wanna be just friends.

I wanna be just friends.

Cuz now I am head over heels

And I really really really feel

We should be more than just friends.

We should be more than just friends.

I told you that it couldn’t be.

You weren’t meant for me.

I said you were my best friend.

But you couldn’t(can't) be more than that.

I think it will sound better if you will use can't instead of couldn't

I said I wanna be just friends.

I said I don’t think of you that way.

I said our relation( relationship) shouldn’t end.

Let’s pretend there never was this day.

I think it will sound better if you say Let's pretend this day never came.

[Chorus]

Cuz now I am in love with you

And I regret ever telling you

I wanna be just friends.

I wanna be just friends.

Cuz now I am head over heels

And I really really really feel

We should be more than just friends.

We should be more than just friends.

I love the chorus

The song has a nice rhythm to it. I was able to listen it in my head, which is good.
It has a nice rhyme scheme.
You used nice words to express your feelings, which was good.


Overall the song is really good. Well done.

~ Anshita

This was good. The only other two things I noticed were the rhyme scheme and punctuation. You had punctuation, but it was very boring. Every. Line. Ended. In. A. Period. It not only makes it boring, but it also throws off the flow a little. Another thing I noticed was the rhyme scheme. It was a bit off balance and seemed to change a lot. It started out even, but then it was like these lines rhyme, but this one doesn't, and this stanza follows the original scheme, but here it changes, and then this doesn't rhyme, but here it does, and so forth. It's a bit confusing. Other than those two things, good job.

Hello!

Ok, nit-pick time!

I said our relation shouldn’t end.

I’m not sure “relation” is the right word.

Let’s pretend there never was this day.

The flow is off for this line. My mind stumbled over it. I think it’s the “was this day ” part.

And I really really really feel

I'm not sure if I like that repetition. In some songs it works great, in others, not so much.

And I said “sorry but I got a date,

But you’ll always be my best mate.”

You said “but” two times in a row. And I think that would be “Sorry, but I got a date,”. Also, the “best mate” sounds forced.

And didn’t give a slight pause

This sounds strange to me.

Ok, so one thing I noticed was that parts of it rhymed, but others didn't. Rhyme is very important in a song, but if it doesn't have it, that's OK too. However, when bits and pieces rhyme, it sounds strange.

Overall, I thought this was very nice. I would love to hear it played, to know the tune.

Anyway, I'll see you around!
-Y