Peace, Love, and California

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Hey! Basket again.
Thanks for letting me know you had this up!

The corrections are going to be the same as last time, mkayy?

It was crisp and clean and new.

All of these words pretty much mean the same thing in the long run. Take one out.

It’s just so satisfying after you fill the page.

I would take "just" out. The sentence sounds just as good without it. =D

and the girl next to her looked as if she thought she was better than anyone else in the room.

This can get kind of confusing... I think I got what you meant--that she thinks she's better than anyone else, but you may want to clarify by adding what I added in bold.
If how I took it is actually what you meant. If not, then great. Keep it as is.

It truly was a gorgeous thing to draw.

This was a really good chapter. I enjoyed it very much.
Lets see...
Your characters.
Well, in all truthfulness, you really haven't given us much detail about them, so I can't really say. So, since this is already the second chapter, I'd try to expand more on the characters. I know when you write, you want to get straight into the good stuff, so you rush through the boring beginning to get to the good stuff.
I do that, too.
It's very hard not to.

Ooh, the first chapter.
Waaaayyyyyy better.
Good job. =D

Hoped this helped and can't wait for the next chapter. =D
-Basket-

"You are the only person that can make my heart beat faster and slower at the same time" - The Hot Chick

If you are trying to convey a serious-toned story, it wouldn't be the best to include a line from a teen comedy.

I grabbed my sketch book from under my bed, it was crisp and clean and new, completely untouched.

The class wasn't scheduled to begin for several minutes, so I passed the time by looking at all of the people in the class so far. This was a common hobby of mine; people watching.

I think you focus way too much on the people surrounding Madison. It would be great to know what she's thinking, so we can have a better feeling of who she is and what she is like.

I am first and foremost a painter, but I also love to draw and sketch random...

looking at peoples' drawings,

The dozen, or so, of us in the room slowly finished our last strokes and looked up. A few people stretched out their arms.

I really do not like that last added scentence. It would've been better if you wrote: "...Slowly finished our last strokesand looked up while a few people stretched out their arms."

Alexandria and Alekzander were standing in the opposite corner, talking to together.

I understand they are twins, but I think it's rather corny to have their names so similar. I would have also liked it much more if they could've been named Alex and Lexi or something.

There were no other mentor-like people in the room, so it took me about two seconds to conclude that the two of them were teaching this class.

They were green with a little bit of blue and with a few brown flecks in them, absolutely gorgeous.

He was staring intently at me.

You have used this word several times in one chapter.

Overall:
This entire story just feels like a play-by-play narrative by a tween girl, focusing on art more than literature. I understand the story is about art, but I feel that you could include literary elements to make this story come off as a true literary piece. The characters are 2-dimensional. Again, the main character comes off as a young, teen girl that obsessively over-describes the people around her much too often. Alekzander is even more 2-dimensional than Madison, we still know nothing about his character besides his appearance. Sorry if I sound as thouh I am coming down way too hard on you, but I feel that you can make this a whole lot better.

Mwahaha! I've returned and might I say, I enjoyed this chapter

I like Madison, she seems like a real person in my opinion only maybe you should describe th surroundings more and work on what she think about those surroundings (people/buildings/sky/animals/etc...) But, Kiki is right about us not knowing much about her personality, work on that as well.

I agree with Kiki on the whole Alekzander thing to, we only know what he looks like. Possibly you could give us more of an insight on him?

Anyway, loved this! Can't wait for the next chapter.

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Will

Sorry it took me so long to get to this.

There was a girl in the corner already scribbling on her sketch pad and the girl next to her looked as if she was better than anyone else in the room.

I think you mean "looked as if she thought she was better..." Or do you mean that the MC really think that?

I liked the scene between Alekzander and Madison. Except I agree with Basket, there needs to be more description. I think Madison's personality is coming out more in this, though I am still kind of iffy on Alekzander's.

Great job!
Becca

I'm doing this as I go, so maybe I'll get more done right!

Coming here, you had a focus, like for me it was painting and sketching, but you could take any classes you wanted to as long as you took at least one class in your focus a day.

I spy with my little eye, more second person! Not sure how to fix it exactly, but toy around with it for a while, and hopefully something better with no "you's" will appear!

Time really flies when I begin to sketch.

Don't swap tenses!

The dozen, or so, of us in the room

You don't need the commas in there.

It looked like almost a perfect image of the vase in front of me, I was happy with it.

I know people tend to advise against this, but change the comma to either a semi-colon, or preferably, a period.

People were already moving around, getting their partner. It didn’t take me very long to figure out I was the only one left without one. “Would you mind if I was your partner?” A voice said from behind me. I quickly turned around. It was Alekzander.

Put Alekzander's words in a new paragraph, then Madison's, then Alekzander's again, each in their own paragraph. I just think it'll look cleaner that way!

“I’ll see you around.” He said

Change it to a comma, and a lowercase "H".

Now, I hate to say it, but it's character time. The characters are flat, and Madison seems pretty emotionless to me, other than the butterflies for Alekzander, which I personally find cliche, but understandable. Now, besides Alekzander's facial appearance, we know nothing about him. For Madison, we don't even have that much. Now, it's good you didn't do an info-dump, where you describe your character until we can picture him/her clearly... in one paragraph. I'm glad you stayed away from that! Plus, besides knowing Alexandria is Alekzander's sister, I don't know anything about her. Is she secretly mean? Is she blonde (mentally OR physically)? Let us know your characters like you know them!

Also, like Kiki said, you focus too much on the people surrounding her. I mean, yes it's good to drop in on random people occasionally, but only if they're going to be a big part. Also, maybe give Alexandria and Alekzander nicknames, like Lexi or Dria, and Alek or something, okay? It'll make things less confusing a bit more... real. People with names like that usually go by nicknames, at least where I'm from

Other than that, I loved it! Keep writing and let me know when the next part comes out! Can't wait!