Me and You

For once
I just wish you would listen
For once
I just wish that
You’d pretend to care

-Guitar-

I’m saying
You are my whole heart
And nothing can shake it
My wounds heal
My heart is free with you
Basically I’m saying
I’d do anything for you

My world
My heart
Leaves me
When I can not see you
And I feel
Alone

You open my eyes
I am finally alive
With you

-I’d do anything for you-

I’m saying
You are my whole heart
And nothing can shake it
My wounds heal
My heart is free with you
Basically I’m saying
I’d do anything for you

This is not what I wanted
I see you
You’re in pain
I’m sorry baby
I can’t be there for you

It’s too late
But I tried
I’m sorry
I’m not used to
Beating this feeling down

-Is this some kind of dream?-

I’m saying
You are my whole heart
And nothing can shake it
My wounds heal
My heart is free with you
Basically I’m saying
I’d do anything for you

-Guitar-

You make me strong
You make me warm
You are my soul
You’re everything

I can’t believe this
What is this madness?
They call a dream

I’m saying
You are my whole heart
And nothing can shake it
My wounds heal
My heart is free with you
Basically I’m saying
I’d do anything for you

You are my whole heart
And nothing can shake it
My wounds heal
My heart is free with you
Basically I’m saying
I’d do anything for you

With everything you do
I’d do anything for you

Hey! June here!


I rarely review lyrics due to their tricky nature, but I noted that this doesn't have any reviews, so I'll have a stab.


Anyway! I would really love to hear this song played and sang and such, because I'm having a bit of trouble finding a melody to put to this in my head.



Some of it was pretty confusing, like at the end. I wasn't too sure what was being spoken about at that point or whatever-- but it's good. Overall, I think you've got a pretty good song...


... now to make you sing it .


June

I like the lyrics very much. You had good choice of words.

I’m saying
You are my whole heart
And nothing can shake it
My wounds heal
My heart is free with you
Basically I’m saying
I’d do anything for you

I like the chorus part. It exactly shows how you feel for that person.

My world
My heart
Leaves me
When I can not see you
And I feel
Alone

I Love this stanza. It makes a connection with the reader.

Rhymes scheme

Very nice rhyme scheme used. I liked the way you didn't just stuck to one rhyme scheme.

Rhythm

Very nice rhythm. I was able to hear the song clearly in my head, which is really good. Every reader can make a whole new beat to this song, which is awesome.

Overall

The song is really good. Nice rhyme scheme used, nice rhythm, nice everything. I just love the song. Well done.

- Anshita