Moon Rose

A/N= ehe. this actually stared as an assignment. We had 7 minutes to write a poem about whatever came to mind. Well, since I had "Ghost of a Rose" by Blackmore's Night stuck in my head this is what I got. It's kindda weird but the last verse is kindda got addicting to say over and over again:

Moon Rose

Promise to think
Promise to see
The rose that blooms
For the Pale Moons glee
A thought between us
Hearts intertwined
This ghostly apparition
Is all that remained behind
The colorless petals
Smile back at me
Mocking this once sweet
Serenity
The ghost of a rose
That you gave to me
An illusion on the moors
Alone remains of thee
Thine and Mine
Souls aligned
Came willingly
To the edge of time
A fault A doubt A sin
It may be
Enough to break
The divine eternity

Nice.... Some lines were a bit too long, for the rest of the poem, but I liked this. Good job

coolio!! nice imagery, and it all seems really hearfelt. the rhyming seemed a bit forced in some parts, though, and about this part:
"a thought between us,
hearts intertwined,
this ghostly apparation
is all that remained behind..."
i think perhaps you should change that last line to "is all thats left behind", because it fits better. but thats just one little bitty thing. i liked this poem alot!!