Mirror, Mirror

"Mirror, Mirror, on the wall,
Show me kingdoms' rise and fall.
Show me rulers, cruel and fair.
Show me lands no longer there."

Many questions, many new.
Those with substance, very few.

"Mirror, Mirror, on the wall,
You who see and know it all,
Knowledge lost is what I seek
Pretty, please, grant me a peek?"

Knowledge constantly is lost
Despite its rather pricey cost.

"Mirror, Mirror, on the wall,
You who now must heed my call,
The hearts of Greatness I will see.
Come, reveal them now to me."

Many masters I have served.
Many of them, least deserved.

"Mirror, Mirror, on the wall,
Who is fairest of us all
In this kingdom that I rule?
Do not take me for a fool!"

Many things I've come to know.
Many things I've shown cause woe.

"Mirror, Mirror, on the wall,
Do you wish to end it all –
This endless rain of endless question,
This futile search for vain perfection?

"Mirror, Mirror, answer true,
What is it you want to do?
Surely you must have some dreams...?
Perhaps all is not what is seems."

"Dreams?" you ask. I tell you, "None.
My talents number only one."

"Mirror, Mirror, time to rest.
Be assured; you’ve done your best.
You have served your purpose well.
Now, it's time to say farewell."

Time, at last, exists no more
For Mirror, Mirror evermore.

Wonderful poetry, hon! The rhyme scheme sounds perfectly natural. You are a rhyming pro!

The only little flaws I found were these;

The hearts of Greatness I will see.

Greatness does not need to be capitalized. It is like capitalizing Pretzel. Or Cat or Dog.

"Mirror, Mirror, answer true,
What is it you want to do?
Surely you must have some dreams...?
Perhaps all is not what is seems."

"Dreams?" you ask. I tell you, "None.
My talents number only one."

This section seems to drone on a bit, and does not actually do anything for the poem. I would consider removing it. It might be hard to do, but that is the only part of the poem that doesn't sound very rhythmic and natural.

Other than that, great job !

I hope I helped a little; you were wonderful .

~April

Thanks for the review.

This section seems to drone on a bit, and does not actually do anything for the poem. I would consider removing it. It might be hard to do, but that is the only part of the poem that doesn't sound very rhythmic and natural.

The thing is, it shows that the mirror can only ever be a mirror and that, despite having consciousness, it has no desires.

I'll see if I can rephrase it so it sounds better.