Haiku: Rice Krispies

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Skye
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Thu Dec 16, 2004 11:04 pm
Skye says... · Thu Dec 16, 2004 11:04 pm
I don't know where this came from, but I'm posting it anyways, even if it is a bit retarded. It helps if you imagine the sounds. Oninonepea (sp?) is such a beautiful thing.


Splish Splash Drip Slap Splosh
Snap Crackle Pop Pop Pop Snap Crackle
Crunch Crunch Crunch Gulp Cough
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Mon Dec 20, 2004 11:34 am
Matt Bellamy says... · Mon Dec 20, 2004 11:34 am
Yeah, I guess it does help you imagine the sounds. And brings back memories of eating breakfast when I was younger. Yuck, I am so sick of Rice Krispies. And I'm rambling because I don't know what to say about the poem. Not great. Not terrible.
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Wed Dec 14, 2005 3:57 am
Snoink says... · Wed Dec 14, 2005 3:57 am
Haikus are 5, 7, 5 - not 5, 11, 5. Otherwise, the memories are coming back...

I hate soggy rice crispies. ><
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Wed Dec 14, 2005 4:01 am
Natyr Lucio says... · Wed Dec 14, 2005 4:01 am
Onomatopoeia

That is an interesting piece... and the last line mae me laugh. I have nothing against its theme. Everything works perfectly. And yet...it's such a simple piece.

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