Haiku Train

BarrettBenedict · 2009-04-26T07:14:14Z

This is pretty simple and can be lots of fun. The premise is you take the last line of the haiku before yours and make it the first as yours. It doesn't necessarily have to be the exact line either. If you can cleverly change it in subtle ways so that it rhymes or sounds the same that is also cool. Example: This is a haiku five, seven, five syllables would be the format ... could be a doormat were it not for the large head must be tiger's skin etc. So here's a starter haiku: old film reels rotate monochrome images of what dogs imagine

syzygy

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Tue Feb 20, 2024 1:13 am

syzygy says... · Tue Feb 20, 2024 1:13 am

sharp emotion bleeds
as you fall down on a knee
you said you loved me

"sounds gay, i'm in!"

he/they

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Spearmint

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Tue Feb 20, 2024 8:14 am

Spearmint says... · Tue Feb 20, 2024 8:14 am

you said you loved me
i never believed it, but
maybe it was true.

mint, she/her

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Hijinks

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Wed Feb 21, 2024 2:31 am

Hijinks says... · Wed Feb 21, 2024 2:31 am

maybe it was true,
when you said it meant nothing
and messed up my hair.

When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

they/them
(previously whatchamacallit and Seirre)

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herb

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Wed Feb 21, 2024 3:16 am

herb says... · Wed Feb 21, 2024 3:16 am

...and messed up my hair."
you complained to me but
my ears were plugged

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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fatherfig

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Wed Feb 21, 2024 3:21 am

fatherfig says... · Wed Feb 21, 2024 3:21 am

my ears were plugged
when the family tree fell
its quake shook me still

[insert inspirational quote here]

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Spearmint

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Wed Feb 21, 2024 8:42 am

Spearmint says... · Wed Feb 21, 2024 8:42 am

its quake shook me still
the wave crashed over me and
left me motionless

mint, she/her

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herb

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Thu Feb 22, 2024 12:28 pm

herb says... · Thu Feb 22, 2024 12:28 pm

left me motionless
where nothing never occurs
in time, space, or fate

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Hijinks

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Fri Feb 23, 2024 6:47 pm

Hijinks says... · Fri Feb 23, 2024 6:47 pm

in time, space, fate—or
your arms. skin and bones are more
safe than the abstract.

When you're faced with something you don't understand, I think the most natural thing but also least interesting thing you can be is afraid.

-- Hank Green

they/them
(previously whatchamacallit and Seirre)

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herb

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Fri Feb 23, 2024 6:51 pm

herb says... · Fri Feb 23, 2024 6:51 pm

safe, then the abstract.
(as a concept, you are real)
my deceiving mind.

[soon, i will submit myself to the stars]

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Plume

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Sat Feb 24, 2024 8:12 pm

Plume says... · Sat Feb 24, 2024 8:12 pm

my deceiving mind's
absolute favorite victim
is, simply put, me.

I was born to speak all mirth and no matter.

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Spearmint

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Sun Feb 25, 2024 10:56 pm

Spearmint says... · Sun Feb 25, 2024 10:56 pm

is, simply put, me.
me at dawn, twilight, midnight.
all day except noon.

mint, she/her

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OrabellaAvenue

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Thu Mar 07, 2024 7:19 am

OrabellaAvenue says... · Thu Mar 07, 2024 7:19 am

all day except noon
when the sun casts a shadow
pointing far from you

If you ever want to talk, please feel free to PM me for any reason! ^^
Don't write because you're a writer; write because you have something to say.
Orabella ~ Ora ~ Avenue ~ Aven
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Plume

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Sun Mar 31, 2024 6:46 pm

Plume says... · Sun Mar 31, 2024 6:46 pm

pointing far from you,
my heart's compass, my worn map;
i reroute, start new.

I was born to speak all mirth and no matter.

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herb

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