THIS IS NOT A STORY dont read

sorry people didnt like it.

i feel flattered and i just figured out why trinity put that on her blog.

but it was about a princesses

Since there is only one princess, it shouldn't be plural.

who was about to be attacked by a dragon but then a prince saved her and then the princesses friend came in a submarine and killed the prince so the princess stepped off the rock but the friend jumped on so the princess killed her friend but then the rock fell on her and the horses but the horses survived and went off but then the princess turned into a zombie and crawled after them it was off the mac and it was one of those frame by frames and you move the toys.

This part is kind of long. Maybe you could have Robin text something in the middle.


The story is okay, but it has no plot. What is the point of each of the conversations? Right now, it is okay, but it could be better.

This part is kind of long. Maybe you could have Robin text something in the middle.


The story is okay, but it has no plot. What is the point of each of the conversations? Right now, it is okay, but it could be better.

Eliza

this was me and robin texting btw...and it did make sense maybe not to you but to us.
but i can see what you are saying...shame on you robin...jkjk.

Honestly? I was kind of bored. It had nothing to it... just a conversation with no feel.
Like, for example.

rubinlikes2write wrote:Robin to Allie: ur interesting and fun to talk to g2g byee

Uhm. That just made me feel weird.

There wasn't any drama, action, or anything. It's okay. But... you really should work on it.

What is this really about? To me, it made no sense at all. Why don't you try your hand at writing more refined stories? And oh, please refrain from using Net Speak, not just because it's in the rules, but because it's kind of... unpleasant. And weird.




You can be better. Show us what you've got.