My Little girl.

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My little girl - Hayley’s song



You can hear it in her voice,
You can see it in her smile,
Oh, she wants to do you good,
She wants to make you proud.

Don’t let her fade away
Don’t let her slip from you

Keep her close to you,
And I promise,
In good time, she will shine.
So don’t let her fade away
No, don’t let her fade away

Give me a day and I’ll be, alright
But give me the world and I’ll sit, and I’ll shine.

You can hear it in her voice,
You can see it in her smile,
Oh, she wants to do you good,
She wants to make you proud.

When you leave, when you go
Don’t tell me, otherwise
Don’t expect me too say ok,
When you say, you’re sorry,

Cause’ it’s not ok, no, it’s not ok,
All these years when you tell me,
You’ll be home,
All these days when you tell me,
a moment from now.

Don’t let her fade away,
Don’t let her slip from you,

It’s never plain and simple with you,
It’s never I’ll say or I’ll do,
I think it’s for the best if you leave,
And don’t come running back to me.

You can hear it in her voice,
You can see it in her smile,
Oh, she wants to do you good,
She wants to make you proud.

You can hear it in her voice,
You can see it in her smile,
Oh, she wants to do you good,
She wants to make you proud.

Yes, she wants to make you proud....


I've been writing this song for some time and trying to find whether I should take song-writing further...




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I really like this! But some things I am confused about: In the beginning of the song you used the words "her" and "she", and then all of a sudden you're talking about yourself, saying things like "I" or "me". So is the song about you? Or her?
It’s never plain and simple with you,
It’s never I’ll say or I’ll do,
I think it’s for the best if you leave,
And don’t come running back to me.

Love this verse! It flows very easily :)




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Yeah i came in conflict with that as well. I don't really understand whos point of view it is coming from the entire time. it makes sense for both parties so its kind of confusing. Otherwise i love it. its a good subject to enter your heart and blossem into a song like this.



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