Young Writers Society

I've been working on this on and off for the past three months or so (a couple minutes here, ten minutes there...) and, aside from the colors (which I am too tired to fix right now), I'm fairly happy with this. Comments on anything but the colors would be appreciated. :D

Woah! O.o
(this won't be much of a critique, sorry.)

I love this! The colors are great, the horse is awesome! The green cloak and blonde hair makes him/her kinda look like a Fey (elf/fairy)! I also love the scenery. The boats and ocean. The only thing is, it looks a little crooked. And... The horses butt looks kinda too big. (Sorry, I feel funny saying that.) Other-wise, Love It!
~Storm

PS: Gold Star!

Hiya!
Honestly, I have very little to critique for this photo. It looks very well done, and the colors are actually very nice.
My only nitpick is proportion in a couple of places. The horse's rear end, for example, seems almost insanely big complared to the rest of him. Also, his legs, as well as the rider's legs are really skinny. Or is that the way you intended it to be? If so, Mea Culpa and all my apologies are given.
Other than that, I'm actually really impressed with this. I think it gives off an air of mystery, of anticipation. Great job!

Tootles!
~ Eden

Thank you you two. :D

The horse's butt is insanely big. XD I originally had the legs thicker, but it just didn't look right no matter what I did. DX Also, I couldn't find a reference of a horse from that particular perspective, so I had to wing it.

As for the rider's leg, most of it is hidden beneath a flap of the cloak. And I kind of messed up the foot, so the angle is a bit off... XD

Here's the color-corrected version.

Heya!

Neat picture, the mixture of all the colours is pretty interesting.

Okay, looking at the new picture above let's see what I can.

1) The horse's butt is quite large. But I'm sure it would work if you fattened the legs up. There are breeds of horses that are short and stocky.

2) The height of the horse is bugging me though. It seems so small and the rider too big. Small enough to be a pony. Maybe that's what it is or a young horse. But that's just me.

3) You could possibly give the horse more tail. It just seems so thin and horses usually have a lot of hair in their tail. Especially at the top. It looks quite fuzzy at times.

4) The way the sky and water are. It looks slightly...unreal. Sorry to say but it looks like two blue blobs. I must sound so mean but you could improve somehow to make it more realistic looking. Compared to the horse and rider and land, it looks blah.

5) The rocks (those are rocks at the bottom right?) look slightly unreal.

Overall: I know you said don't comment on the colours, but I like the colour you chose for the grass. It looks quite real ^_^ Even the road does. The horse's butt could use some tweaking to make it look more...hairer. Other than those nit-picks, this is a good piece! Good job on everything!

Meadow

Wow, this is great.

The rocks: I think the rocks could have been a little more realistic. Right now they just look like circles, really. Well, ovals.

The sky: I would love to see a cloud or two. The sky just seem so blank. Maybe you could even add a bird? Maybe even add a lowering sun?

The hair: You can draw really nice hair. It looks real almost.

The path: I think the path looks a little too perfect. I think you should add some foot prints behind the horse or something. You can't forget the small details.

Horse's butt: Yes, it is way too big. XD I think if you make the legs a bit more 'meaty' It'll fix that.

Man's leg: I agree that it is a little off. You can draw over it easily though. I think the foot is too long. I don't know how to change it though.

Hair 2: You have the mane black and the tail brown? I think you should make the tail black as well. (Seeing as it's be hard to make the mane brown, now.)

Boats: I think you should add some wind sails in there too. This picture looks like it is in the past. So, make the boats look old too.

Cape: I love this, great job. However, you might want to think about making a patch or two in it. Nothing is ever really perfect. I think you are going for realism here? So, add some 'Beauty marks' to the Cape.


Overall: I liked this a lot. It is easy to tell that you spent a lot of time on this. You cannot forget the small details though, they're important too.


---Jon---

Rocks? o_O If you mean the white things, they were supposed to be white stone buildings. Very sloppily done white stone buildings. XD

I was wondering when someone would comment on the sky. XD I originally had some windswept clouds, but they refused to cooperate, so I nuked them. They still refuse to cooperate every time I try and add them in...

The height of the horse is bugging me though. It seems so small and the rider too big. Small enough to be a pony. Maybe that's what it is or a young horse. But that's just me.

That was intentional, actually. :3 It's a young horse, plus the rider is tall.

You could possibly give the horse more tail. It just seems so thin and horses usually have a lot of hair in their tail. Especially at the top. It looks quite fuzzy at times.

Tried that, but it ended up looking really messy. XD The horse had a hair cut? :P

I think the path looks a little too perfect. I think you should add some foot prints behind the horse or something.

If the path is dry or packed enough, no footprints. :P Plus I'm lazy. XD

You have the mane black and the tail brown? I think you should make the tail black as well. (Seeing as it's be hard to make the mane brown, now.)

Well, the mane is in shadow. I'll add a couple of brownish highlights in near the top so it's more obvious the mane is brown too. Later. When I can bear to poke at this picture again. XD

I think you should add some wind sails in there too

I thought I had some. I'm guessing they aren't very visible... XD Another thing on the "To Fix Up" list.

You cannot forget the small details though, they're important too.

The small details always get me, yes they do. XP

I actually liked it better before you changed the colors. It gave it an air of mystery, it seemed dark like maybe it could have been a picture with sadness. It's still pretty, and I absolutely adore it, but since it is lighter now, the bit of mystery it held if softened. Yes, the horses butt is huge, but it be a rather old, stocky horse. I've seen some with huge cabooses and I did not really notice the horses but until I saw it was mentioned, then I look at it and smile.

Overall, I love the colors and textures. His hair and the cloak look perfect together, red-ish blonds look perfect with the hunter green cloak. The grass looks free and wild, I like how you kept the wind blowing in one direction, some don’t watch the wind effect and you can never tell which way it is supposed to be blowing. Brilliant mate, please keep up the work! I would love to see more!

Hi Kyllorac! I'm June!

Whoa, you're good! This is amazing!


The right side of his cloak looks a little furry. I know you're probably trying to show that it's blowing, but it looks like fur to me.

I love the color tone-- it's nice and warm.


Also! The buildings look like Oxen horns a little bit. Like, the whole shape of them, looks like cattle horns or something. XD

I know how frustratingly hard it is to draw clouds, yuck. Maybe try cumulus clouds instead of the wispy ones?

Nice work. Keep it up!

June

Awesome! I'm not one to really critique art, so all I can say is great job! I don't see much wrong with the colors, so what are you talking about? The colors look fine to me! I agree with Storm_Bringer though, the butt of the horse looks a bit big . I absolutely LOVE the water though!! I want to be there so badly!

what medium?

wow. I would be happy with this piece of work no matter what people say. The colours look fine to me, if they were too bright then the mood of it would be ruined.

The whole sadness and loneliness adds a certain "air" about it and I really can't stop staring *stares* hehee. It is a truly fantastic picture!

I'm not really good at this kind 'o thing so to me I think it's an amazing piece of artwork (:

Keep drawing and I look forward very much to seeing some more artwork ^^

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Thanks everyone. n_n It makes me so happy that you all like it.

But my lovely vivid colors! Nuuu! Then again, the mysterious/sad/ominous mood is very fitting considering that the rider dies in that place... XD

God wrote:what medium?

Digital. Did this on an oekaki board (NeondragonArt). :3

Neondragon Art? *gasps* I love her work!

The rider also dies in that place? I'm now assuming this is a scene in a story you're writing or am I wrong?

MeadowLark wrote:Neondragon Art? *gasps* I love her work!

Yup. I used to be a regular on her oekaki boards, but not so much anymore. XD

The rider also dies in that place? I'm now assuming this is a scene in a story you're writing or am I wrong?

Yes and no. It was more an exercise in characterization which wound up being really good, only I can't use it in the main story because I kind of need this guy alive since he's the main viewpoint character. XD And so it shall linger in the shadows of my harddrive as I fondly reminisce about it.

And I might as well just tell you that the rider is Thirilight from the story that bears his name.