a night of shining amore

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Your eyelashes flicker my cheek lightly
and your tiny fingers find my hand.
It's a wonder they don't disintegrate when I kiss them,
and that you are never squashed
when I hold you tight.

Your skin is so soft it feels like innocence
and your hair is so silky it slides through
the lightest touch, but inside, inside you are
a berlin wall of determination and like the
best sweets, I can't wait until I melt you down
so that I can savour the taste of you.
Nate wrote:And if YWS ever does become a company, Jack will be the President of European Operations. In fact, I'm just going to call him that anyways.




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Very romantic... overly romantic? Ah, well... it's how you feel. *shrug*




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Oh gracious... that was beautiful. I really liked the play on words in the title; it's clever.

My favourite line other than that was most definitely "Your skin is so soft it feels like innocence". That is such a wonderful description. I would never think of anything like that, but the description is so perfect... Ah man, perfect.

I really like this overall. It's so simple and sweet and romantic, yet holds a hint of something deeper. Nice work, as usual, Jack.
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