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As Kyrstin walked down the long, maze-like corridors, she passed on of the towering windows and noticed that the once exuberant sun had faded away behind a a wall of clouds. A thick layer of fog hovered and clung to the ground like a wet shirt.

As the fog grew closer, Kyrstin noticed some strange snarling, gurgling noises. She watched until it sounded like the noises were just on the other side of the glass.
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I'm kind of confused with the plot. Can you explain it to me?
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Hey, can I make a second character?


Name: Lily Osborne

Age: 17

Gender: Female

Grade: (would she be around 10th grade?)

Appearance: She is tall, and has the strawberry blonde hair and fair skin like her twin sister.

Personality: She is more of a prankster than her sister, and her funny personality makes her a well loved member of the school community. She is best friends with her twin, Elena, who she loves very much.

History: She had the same caring, loving environment as her sister. she has always been very close to her father, and shares his love for drama and philosophy. She wants to teach drama when she leaves school.




Elena

Elena walked absentmindedly along the corridor, wandering to her next class, whilst reading the leaflet she had picked up on getting into medical school, when she bunped into someone.
'I'm so sorry!' she gasped.

She had gotten close to the Hostory room when she heard a noise, a strange noise, like...rumbling?
Maybe.

Without thinking, she found herself moving toward the source of the noise, the janotor's closet.

She went to open the door, her hand touching the handle, about t gi in, to search, when a voice made her jump.
'Elena!!'
'Lily! What's wrong with you! You nearl scared the life out of me!'
'Sorry...hey what's up? You're all like white.'
'I..um..nothing. I've gotta get to class. See you st lunch?'
'Sure.'

With that, she strode off to History, goosebumps still on her arms...what on earth was that noise?
Spooky.
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Name: Sare Agama

Age: 12

Gender: Male

Grade: Seventh (is this okay?)

Appearance: Waist-long black hair, green eyes, tall, slender legs.

Personality: A serious and deep thinker. She rarely smiles, but when she does, it is a large one.

History: Her parents died when she was five, and she has lived with friends ever since. She likes plants and animals, and wants to become a biologist.
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PROBLEM!!!
this story isn't doing so hot! (sorry to point out the obvious)
It could run the risk of being deleted! PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, post on here again. if you have any comments or anything at all please pm me!

*Archer*
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