Waiting For You

[b]WAITING FOR YOU

The smell of rain reaches my heart
And the ongoing thoughts of you
Slip from the shadows.

Your smile no longer beams
And your touch has turned conservative.
These mistakes shield me
And your choices keep us apart.

But your light breaks through my darkness
And this emptiness shrinks when you’re near
Feelings of freedom,
Feelings euphoria slip from my grasp
And agony murders my hope.

In the embrace of another
My thoughts still wanders
To you.
Guilt rises
And frustration crushes.

The caress of rain soothes my skin
And I pray it’ll wash everything away.
In the middle of this storm,
I wait for you.
I still wait for you, like I always have.

ConfusingSillyLittleGirl wrote:WAITING FOR YOU

The smell of rain reaches my heart i would put a period here.
And the ongoing thoughts of you here without and
Slip from the shadows. that sentence in p.continuous(are slipping from the shadows)

Your smile no longer beams
And your touch has turned conservative.
These mistakes shield me
And your choices keep us apart. There's no rhythm in this stanza.

But your light breaks through my darkness
And this emptiness shrinks when you’re near
Feelings of freedom,
[b]Feelings euphoria slip from my grasp i didn't understand that line
And agony murders my hope. quite good

In the embrace of another
My thoughts still wanders
To you. If someone is wandering, he doesn't know where to go...you said the place...
Guilt rises
And frustration crushes. There's nothing important in this verse...like I'm reading a drama cause of this "and this and that"
The caress of rain soothes my skin
And I pray it’ll wash everything away.
In the middle of this storm,
I wait for you.
I still wait for you, like I always have. Not enough emotions in it

If this is your first try, it's great... You need to work on the rhythm.

What did I do with that bold letters???? Arghhhhhhh....*dies*

Haha yeah what did you do, joke, thanks, I never really was good in rythm, but I'm going to try and improve it.