Dark Elves- back cover

DARK ELVES





BY. A.A Eboreime






back cover


This is a book filled with stories. Stories long forgotten by man neither is it one continuous story but a collection of tales from elven races from the depths of the ground and from the woodlands of the north.
Stories of kings of the dwarfs and light elves. Of battles, of misfortune and tragedy. Of pleasure and fun. Come-hither to read of stories that you never imagined to read.

This is Dark Elves.

Hello! I'm Hannah. C: This was really short. o_O; Was there supposed to be more on it?

In any case, I really don't think this is very good as a prologue anyways!

As quoted from this website:

"The prologue has to contribute to the plot. It has to reveal significant, relevant facts, without which the reader will be missing something. You cannot afford to have your prologue idling away under the pretence of creating an atmosphere. Its first duty is to supply information that is or will be vital to the understanding of the plot.

But that's hardly enough. After all, every chapter delivers key facts, which ultimately amount to the plot. What makes bits of information require a prologue? Any number of reasons. Perhaps relating them in the body of the novel would cause a breach in point-of-view etiquette. Perhaps they occur in another time or place, and have too much weight to mention by-the-by. Or they might choke the narrative to death with background details. Any of these cases, and some others (which we'll soon discuss), call for a prologue."

Consider those things when you call something a prologue! As this work is now, it seems more like what you might place on the back cover of a book, or you might even stick it in before the first chapter in italics? ^_^

Anyways, onto the actual material. xD

This is a book filled with stories. Stories long forgotten by man. It is not one continuous story but a collection of tales from elven races from the depths of the ground and from the woodlands of the north.

I don't know that there's any reason to separate the first two sentences -- you should combine them all to make just one sentence, otherwise it seems like a cheesy ploy to heighten the drama of the passage. xP Also, I don't think you'd need to clarify that the book won't be one continuous story, since your readers will figure that out. C: 'Depths of the ground', though? What do you mean there?

Stories of kings of the dwarfs and light elves. Of battles, of misfortune and tragedy. Of pleasure and fun. Come-hither to read of stories that you never imagined to read.

>_< Eck, the way you drag on talking about the subjects is kind of... cumbersome. We'll find out what the stories are about, I'm sure. Maybe say what connects them all, if there is a connection? If you do keep that part though, I don't think 'fun' really adds to the tone you're trying to create. The last sentence doesn't really make sense, either. >_<;; I mean, if we never imagined we'd read them, that's okay, but why would you point that out without knowing what everyone imagines? I don't know, it seems weird to me.

^_^ That's my two cents~~

-Hannah-