Untitled Story - Chapter 1

“Have a good time. See you at Christmas!” Luciano’s mum said as he run up the school steps. While he did so he observed loads of friends talking together. He must’ve been one of the very few new people that year. Luciano walked into the building and entered the bursar’s office. He knocked on the door and opened it. Luciano asked him for his locker and room keys and his timetable. The bursar gave them to Luciano. Once Luciano walked out, he looked at his timetable and smiled.
“Yes! Free period!” he whispered loudly.

SimplyMe wrote:“Have a good time. See you at Christmas!” Luciano’s mum said as he run up the school steps. While he did so he observed loads of friends talking together. He must’ve been one of the very few new people that year. Luciano walked into the building and entered the bursar’s office. He knocked on the door and opened it. Luciano asked him for his locker and room keys and his timetable. The bursar gave them to Luciano. Once Luciano walked out, he looked at his timetable and smiled.
“Yes! Free period!” he whispered loudly.

Good start but I have one or two points that might help.

Tell the reader how Luciano is feeling , am I right in presuming that he has started a new privet school? Well if I am I would imagine he would be more nervous or existed. Secondly go into detail about what things look like when he gos to get his time table you know things like that.

But other then that, very well done. Keep it up

V. nice, you have a nice writing style and I would enjoy reading on.

I think, sometimes, to get rid of repetitiveity (I know - can't spell) of sentence structures, you should vary them.
Instead of, this i just may opinion:

SimplyMe wrote:Luciano walked into the building and entered the bursar’s office. He knocked on the door and opened it.

Maybe:

Luciano walked into the building, knocked on the busar's office's door and entered.

Then you could describe how he entered e.g quietly.

Also, I think you should do a short description of Mum, I don't know, just add something simple like "said (and instead of said, maybe shouted, though sometimes the word "said" adds a nice simple effect) the blonde-haired smile that was my Mum"

Overall, very nice, engaging beginning