Well that was a complete waste of points! Make sure you edit this and add more.
It wasn't bad, but there was hardly any thing there. Just a list of names. ^_^
Must you type in all capital letters? It was very difficult to read.
This looks very interesting, however. I would love to see Edward interaction with the Magical Liopleurodon. ^_^
Also: Because you were pounding on the shift key the entire time you were writing this (at least, that's what I assume) you typed " instead of ' like it should have been.
Finally: You don't need to use more than one exclamation mark. The announcer is shouting, so we know what he is loud and excited in the first place.
This looks like it will be very funny!
~~~~~~~~~~~Sakura~~~~~~~~~~~~
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris? nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior. -Catullus, Carmen 85
I thought it seems intresting, even though it's really short, just make a really long one to make up for it. Oh and by the way you just made my day by adding, three of my favorite things in the whole wide world! I love Kelso he's so dumb it's funny!! Not to mention Alice is kind of crazy and will make this a really good thread! Hope you write more!
"Why don't we let Peeta claim it, since he died today?"-Finnick (Catching Fire) "We may be friends and all, but if were being chased by crazy flesh eating zombies. I won't lie. . .I'll trip you."~ Me after watching the hills have eyes.
Well, Son, I tell you,
Life for me ain't been no crystal stair.
It's had tacks on it,
And nails,
And places with no carpet on the floor.... bare.
Well, Son,
Don't you ever set down
On them steps, 'cause you think it's kinder hard.
I's still going, Honey,
I's still going
And Life for me ain't been no crustal stair.
Overall this seems like itd be very interesting, I'm just wondering how the Leoplouridon is going to fit, and yes I probably spelt it wrong, shush.
I hope you dont use as much full capitalization as you do now, because, and someone else pointed this out as well, we get that the announcer is excited, and I think an Exclamation point would have been enough hah.
Cant wait!
*Wears bunny slippers and sits in front of the TV!
hahah
A story's not a story till you've made it up you see.
Look Mexico.
