Lions

We’re sleeping with the lions tonight
Just don’t let them catch us looking into their eyes
I promise they’ll find a reason to take us, break us and eat us alive
Just don’t look into those deep dark mysterious eyes
We’re sleeping with the lions tonight

Why oh why couldn’t we just believe them
When they said it, said it twice and again

Now look at where we are
Lying down with the cats and
Waking up with whatever’s left of us
We just wouldn’t listen to the words they said
We just wouldn’t listen to the warnings they gave
Look around at where we are

We’re sleeping with the lions tonight
There is no breaking free from this prison
They’ve got us locked in so tight
They’ve got us thinking it’s alright
To look into those deep mysterious eyes
To come close enough to taste
To take that last breath in

Our eyes shut like they’ve always been
We’ve enough like we’ve always said it


Look at where we are
I can’t take this anymore
Lying down with the cats and
Waking up with whatever’s left of us
We just wouldn’t listen
We just wouldn’t listen

Don’t know if we’ll make it till tomorrow
But tonight’s not looking to swell

We’re sleeping with the lions tonight
Just don’t let them catch us looking into their eyes
I promise they’ll find a reason to take us, break us and eat us alive
Just don’t look into those deep dark mysterious eyes
We’re sleeping with the lions tonight

that was a really cool song!! i really liked it and I think you should write more because you have obvious talent at songwriting. It's funny because I could never, ever, think of a song like that. My talent is more in storywriting and I know that I couldn't do that. I wish I could. I hope to see more from you because I enjoyed reading that. Best to you!

Welcome to YWS, Myrcei. So glad you could join an awesome writing site!

Hmm...Very interesting. This seems more like lyrics to a song not dramatic poetry, but if it was intended to be poetry then forget what I said.

I really like the way all this flowed. It had a very nice rhythm and the rhyming punctuated that rhythm. There was nothing forced about this. It was just smooth, which is very good.

I find this to be very emotional. I can feel the tension in areas and I can feel the loss of hope in others. I love the different feelings in this. It makes this a great poem.

I found there to be nothing really wrong with any of the stanzas so I'm just going to shut my mouth and leave that to other nit-picky people.

Kudos to you on the awesome poem!

Becca

Thank you so much for the reviews. . It means the universe to me. Haha.

And it is meant to be a song, Becca. I did the newbie thing and put it in the wrong category.oopsies.