Ends Meet

April 15, 1925
Ouside Kitty Hawk, NC
Kate McAllister squinted up at the sign. "Ends Meet," it read in faded red cursive.
Impatient, Tom pulled at her sleeve. "C'mon, Kate. It's just an old secondhand shop."
"But it doesn't belong here." Kate pulled open the glass door. "Let's at least take a look inside."
Tom grumbled, but he followed her.

An elderly lady was minding the shop. She was wearing a rose-patterned dress. It looked like real cotton; the roses were picked out in emerald and crimson.

"Good eveing," Kate said politely. "Are you the owner?"

"Indeed," said the lady. "Forty years I've run this place."

Kate shook her head. "Forty years? Why haven't I heard of this place?"

"That's the mystery. Not just anyone can find Ends Meet, and not all the time." She tugged at her dress. "Real Colonial cotton, that is."

She must be crazy, Tom thought. Uneasy, he took Kate's hand. "It was nice meeting you, Miss... We have to go now."

"Tom, stop that! You're being rude." Kate yanked her hand away. As she did, she knocked over a magazine. She gasped. "Look! This is dated September 20, 2001!"

This is a really good beginning- I'm interested already even though its quite short. I hope you write more! I can't really think of that much that could be improved but there were a couple of things:

And elderly lady was minding the shop. She was wearing a rose-patterned dress that looked like it was from the 18th century.

I'm not sure about the it 'looked like it was from the 18th century', I think it would be more effective to describe how the dress looks in more detail- faded, unmodern, strange cut so that you can more hint at the idea its from a different time.

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I think it would be nice for the shop to be described a bit more and how the character feels when she enters- is their a bell above the door? Is there any music playing? Details like that.

I think its a great start to a story, I definetly want to read more of it!

I agree with PippieDooda you could elaborate on how the shop looks inside. That would add more interest. So far it's really good. Keep it up I'm interested.