Young Writers Society

(Roaring)
They just can’t stop!
Kicking!
Hitting!
Fucking!
Getting out of my face!
(Calm)
No, they just don’t care
They don’t believe what is or not fare
(Roaring)
They will just continue to burn you up!
Not even peace will make it stop!
(Calm)
They will leave in nothing but a hole
It’s their hobby to suck out your soul
(Roaring)
They don’t give a fuck about how you feel!
(Calm)
You got no choice but to get real
(Roaring)
The law for them is that you can’t be yourself!
God I am still searching for myself on the tall shelf!


(Roaring)
Can’t you feel me?
I am falling into pieces!
Can’t you hear me?
I am burning in my cage!
In rage!

Hey God!
Yea, I am calling for you!
Why you can’t you just listen and hue?
(Calm)
All those motherfuckers are trying to control my head
Even at night they won’t stop, ass naked in bed
(Roaring)
No matter how well you try!
They will just laugh at you and make you die!
(Calm)
Just got to wait until full moon
(Roar)
Then they will meet their doom!

The law for them is that you can’t be yourself!
God I am still searching for myself on the tall shelf!

Can’t you feel me?
I am falling into pieces!
Can’t you hear me?
I am burning in my cage!
In rage!

(Calm)
Today I will destroy my fright
(Everyone)
Let’s fight!
(Calm)
As the moon will rise I will rebuilt the pieces
Today I will destroy my fright
(Everyone)
Let’s fight!
(Calm)
Today will be the day when I will rebuild the pieces
(Roar)
God damn it!
(DRUM SOLO)
(Roar)
Sometimes bad is good!
Today let’s fight in the devils hood!
Sometimes bad is good!
Today let’s fight in the devils hood!
Sometimes bad is good!
Today let’s fight in the devils hood!

Hell yea, I will crush you in the devils hood!

(Calm)
Can you feel me?
I am falling into pieces
Can you feel me?
I am falling into pieces
(Roaring)
Can you hear me now?
As the moon comes out!
Can you hear me?
As my claws will sharpen!
Can you still hear me?
You still have couple more seconds

Today I will destroy my fright
(Everyone)
Let’s fight!
(Roar)
As the moon will rise I will rebuilt the pieces
Today I will destroy my fright

Today I will destroy my fright
(Everyone)
Let’s fight!
(Roar)
As the moon will rise I will rebuilt the pieces
Today I will destroy my fright

Now you don’t want to fight mother fucker!

Gooooooooooooooood!

Quick note: Should be rated R for F-word content.

Yeah I love heavy metal bro
I could like feel the intensity of the song and I would have to say, the lyrics definetly have potential to rock the hell out. I don't must suggestions other than there has to be some sort of crazy ass breakdown somewhere in there!
Nice job.

Wow. I can already feel it pounding in my ears. Awesome job. I like the chorus.

Peacee

_Writing for love is a passion_

~lexie~

this a good song... it shows how life is pure shit and we are stuck here by ourselves. now the fuck and stuff is really screaming out something.. but its really good

this a good song... it shows how life is pure shit and we are stuck here by ourselves. now the fuck and stuff is really screaming out something.. but its really good

Well....It is not exactly telling that life shits. It explains that you have to stand up for your self.

that too i guess but either way i like it

Thanks

what made you write it? why do a clam voice and a roaring one??? things just pop in my head so i had to ask

I'm not the heavy metal type but my friend is in a heavy metal band. I am getting to like it. I think that the change from calm to roar is fantastic and in the song it would be great. The language is intense but it all fits together and has a nice flow. I think you did a superb job.

This is a great heavy metal song because I can imagine it. It's raw and intense, I can imagine where every guitar and drum solo would fit in. I love how the calm parts are, well calm and them you get right into the heavy parts before the reader gets too comfortable, nice job. Maybe try and clean the language up a bit, you can get your point across better without using so many f-bombs.

Hey there Gluz!


I think I promised you I would review this a little while back, but I only just remembered.


The tone in this song for heavy metal is totally set by the language you use . I can totally imagine how this song would be sung, you did a great job with that, dude.

Question!

It’s their hubby to suck out your soul

Is hubby supposed to be hobby?

Your lyrics are always impressive , so I have nothing else to say!

Best--

June