The deranged writer

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A writers dreams, are like a crazy persons thoughts
or maybe his thoughts, are just what that crazy person does
whatever the case, his art sets him free, he opens his heart
as the words just unleash, releasing his feelings, both the good and the bad
not knowing of these, with out a pen and a pad
at least is the case, with this one deranged man,
who only sees truths, when he writes them on hand
he cant live his life, without such an aide
because the thoughts in his mind, are misplaced until laid
on to a page, a wall, or even his hand

if you look at his palms, they are covered with ink
without ink this man, would just sit and not think
A view in his mind, might look just like this:
"A carpet, a hug, a man, she red think"
till writing it down, he knows not what it means
but placed on a page, it is the most beutiful thing,
he writes about love, in a red velvet room, with a man and a woman
better yet a wife and a groom
the pictures he paints, in the mind of the reader
can not compare, to those displayed in a theater
they resemble true life, just as the moments we live
whether a curse or a blessing, we know just one thing
this man could not take it, and preferred not to live
at only twenty and four, after his lifes final page
this man took his pen, and jumped off the 12th floor
when found at the bottom, the words that he bore,
on his forearm read, I can't write anymore.




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A writers dreams, are like a crazy persons thoughts
or maybe his thoughts, are just what that crazy person does
whatever the case, his art sets him free, he opens his heart
as the words just unleash, releasing his feelings, both the good and the bad
not knowing of these, with out a pen and a pad

writer's instead of writers
Maybe you should put something like, "the thoughts of the insane"
Whichever instead of Whatever
Not knowing of those
without is one word
Pen or a pad

at least is the case, with this one deranged man,
who only sees truths, when he writes them on hand
he cant live his life, without such an aide
because the thoughts in his mind, are misplaced until laid
on to a page, a wall, or even his hand

at least the case is
can't (apostrophe)
I think it's aid instead of aide but I'm not sure
I like the last two lines
if you look at his palms, they are covered with ink
without ink this man, would just sit and not think
A view in his mind, might look just like this:
"A carpet, a hug, a man, she red think"

without ink , (comma)
I don't get the last sentence

till writing it down, he knows not what it means
but placed on a page, it is the most beutiful thing,
he writes about love, in a red velvet room, with a man and a woman
better yet a wife and a groom
the pictures he paints, in the mind of the reader

beautiful

can not compare, to those displayed in a theater
they resemble true life, just as the moments we live
whether a curse or a blessing, we know just one thing
this man could not take it, and preferred not to live

Really good

at only twenty and four, after his lifes final page
this man took his pen, and jumped off the 12th floor
when found at the bottom, the words that he bore,
on his forearm read, I can't write anymore.

Life's
The rest is really good
Formerly known as Vivacious.

Full of Cliches:a challenge to see who can write a piece with the most cliches.




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Wow. Really beautiful. Lovely flow. But more than anything, the emotions and message and story in this poem is amazing.

You really captured how misunderstood art is by people at times in your first two lines and that caught my attention at once. The rest of the lines followed logically and all were in rhythm with a vivid choice of words in all descriptions.

Smashing ending. Cripplingly lovely.
All that I'm after is a life full of laughter, as long as I'm laughing with you.:)



When a good man is hurt, all who would be called good must suffer with him.
— Euripides