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weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeird story




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Um....confused? I really don't see how this fits....
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I had something before this...but it was horrible...and I thought it made sense enough without it :P
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aparently not :D just post the one beofore this and maybe we can help.
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Yeah, this was definitely one of your more confusing Hourglass stories.

I think you need to add some more historical stuff or something, because it seems extremely contemporary. I didn't really like this one very much. It was a bit too stream-of-consciousness for me.
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No, it doesn't make much sense, but then I haven't been reading it. Although it is kind of amusing. But then I'm not really interested in humourous writing. However, I do say again that I think we've got a new Gordon Korman. The first book he published was written when he was about your age.
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Hmm...I followed all the rules...it's supposed to sound semi-contemporary, 'cause I hate novels that are like schoolbooks. It's annoying. *checks* all slang/profanity's within time range. *shrugs* Oh well. I have to go over it again anyway. :D Thanks guys!

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