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Nancy Drew

Omi~*~Forever · 2009-01-06T00:51:41Z

Nancy Drew’s first 5 min. Mystery! The mystery of the stolen locket! * I know the grammar will not be perfect. Please don’t comment on wrong grammar and spelling.* ______________________________________________________________________________ Note from the author: This is the first story I have written. I always have and always will read and love Nancy Drew Mysteries! This is just the first paragraph! If you like it please tell me and I will continue to write. I just wanted to see if Nancy Drew would be like by the readers. ______________________________________________________________________________ Here are some main characters: Nancy Drew- A amateur sleuth. Her best friends are Bess and George. She is known to solve many cases and is quick minded and very intelligent! Her father is Carson Drew. Nancy’s mother died when she was young and ever since that she has been mothered by Hannah Gruen. Bess Marvin- Nancy’s best friend. She is often considered pleasantly plump and to be the romantic one of the friends. She is cousins with George. George Fayne- George is a athletic girl who is cousins with George. She is skinny but not as pretty as Bess. She is often more eager to take risks then her cousin Bess. Carson Drew- Nancy’s dad. He is a well known lawyer who has never lost a case. _____________________________________________________________________________ Mystery (First Paragraph) : “ Nancy I believe I have a surprise for you”, said Carson Drew with a twinkle in his eye. Like always, Nancy knew her father had another mystery for her. “Oh dad, please don’t keep me in suspense!” Nancy begged. “Ok, I’ve been asked to take up a case. A man name Mr. Link came to me asking for help. He had been reported to have stolen a locket.” Carson commented. “But, dad a locket is a locket why would this have had the poor man so worried?” “Ahh, I was just getting there, if you would be patient. The locket is worth very much. It was covered with jewels of all types. Mr. Link said he was set up, but has no proof. He would like for you to investigate.” Carson said. Quickly, Nancy agreed to take the case and start investigating. She called Bess and George and they both agreed to help with the mystery.

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Sat Jul 18, 2009 2:34 am

refinedchaos13 says... · Sat Jul 18, 2009 2:34 am

I'm not going to repeat what everyone has already said, but I do wish you'd add a little more detail. I can't really picture what's happening which is important; atleast to me. I love your idea and I do hope to read more. (:

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Tue Jul 21, 2009 7:28 pm

refinedchaos13 says... · Tue Jul 21, 2009 7:28 pm

I'm not going to repeat what everyone else has already said. I think you should work on details and take into consideration what the other reviews say. I couldn't really picture what was going on which is always important but I think its a good start and I'd like to see it finished. (:

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It is only a novel... or, in short, only some work in which the greatest powers of the mind are displayed, in which the most thorough knowledge of human nature, the happiest delineation of its varieties, the liveliest effusions of wit and humour, are conveyed to the world in the best-chosen language
— Jane Austen, Northanger Abbey

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