Tipping The Velvet {ten}

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A bit of a short chapter, but I had to get something at as I left you all on that cliffhanger, and I've vowed to post one chapter each day - which you must hold me to. :wink:

Chapter 10

When Mrs Lincombe had made this revelation in her raw, gravelly voice, Anne did not let out a cry of shock. She did not experience a wave of faintness, or the common hysteria normally occurring in females after a life-changing statement had just been made to them. Her breath did not even catch in her throat. She merely gave a soft, almost inaudible murmur and leant back in her chair, looking into the fireplace.

Anne eventually broke the silence by slowly getting up from the armchair and nudging the kindling in the fire with a poker. A spark leapt up and caught Anne on her small white hand before descending back into the fireplace, a golden snowflake. In time, the fire’s crackling silhouette shuddered and the glow of the fire dulled, paled then began to dim. Before the last ember had died, Anne spoke.

“Why did you not tell me, Mother?” she asked in a perturbed voice concealed with a facade of steadiness.

Mrs Lincombe looked up wearily from her perspiring repose. “I...I am not quite sure of the reason myself, child.”

Anne stared at the cameo glazed into her old enamel brooch. “So these...these are my parents? You are quite sure?” Though Anne did not need an answer, as she was long past her suspicion that Mrs Lincombe was afflicted with delirium.

“Quite sure.”

“Did you know them?” Anne could no longer pretend that she was composed; her voice cracked mid-speech and she thrust her hands up into her hair with agitation.

“No,” Mrs Lincombe said sadly. “No, I’m afraid I didn’t.”
“Then how did you –”

“I know,” Mrs Lincombe sighed inaudibly, “I know, I owe you an explanation. You see, Anne, me late husband – who ye’ll know as yer father - adopted you. Well, not adopted in the legal sense of the word. ‘E brought ye home straight after ‘is business travels in th’East, without much explanation as to ‘ow he obtained yer.
"I...I didn’t question him much in the matter, and ye were a bit of a blessin’ to me really, not being able to bear child for me husband. He went off, oh, on ‘is travels again, and as ye know, when ye were but twelve, he died abroad. And since I’ve brought you up by myself, as me very own.”

“Then...I’m an orphan?” asked Anne, her voice shaking.

“Most likely. Oh Anne, I am so sorry for deceiving you in this way. I...I scarce know how you came about Tynesfield, apart from –”

“Apart from?”

“Go to my room,” instructed Mrs Lincombe with a grievous sigh, “And bring me the small container sittin’ in the green ottoman.”

Anne did so, carrying the flat, black box out of the bedroom and gingerly placing it in Mrs Lincombe’s lap. “This is what you were asking for, is it not?” she asked.

“Indeed.” The woman opened it slowly, and from its depths withdrew a yellowing sheet of paper, curling at the edges, with a broken wax seal hanging on a crease. Ounces of scrawny light segued through the cracks in the windowpane, stressing a visual taint of Mrs Lincombe’s tired eyes, her full cracked lips from which derived an ever-increasing flow of spittle. Seemingly overcome, she handed the vellum sheet to Anne.

With hands bearing slight tremors, she opened it; the writing bore the palsied hand of the aged or sick. Anne began to read it.

    Anne,
    Beware of The Three Horseshoes.
    You must go to Canterbury and find Gibbous.
    Capeside Shipping.
    Look behind the golden wrist.


“What can it mean?” asked Anne, bewildered.

“I haven’t the faintest,” admitted her adoptive mother. “But I thinks me late husband ‘ad an inkling. He didn’t want to show it to me, but I stumbled across it and ‘e warned me not to show it to yer till the time was right.”

“Do you think I would be right to trust what is in this letter?” asked Anne. “It’s...it’s all rather vague. And besides – I have no way of knowing who wrote it.”

Mrs Lincombe nodded. “It’s not me husband’s hand, that’s fer sure.”

“And it seems like such...such a dangerous business. Maybe I had better ignore it...”

The bed-ridden lady shook her head decisively. “As far as I’ve learnt in me years, it’s not to leave things aside. They’ll always come jumping back at yer.”

“Then I should...obey it?”

“I dun’t know, me child. Wait a bit. Be sure to entrust this to nobody – though maybe that kind Mr Murdoch could be of assistance.”

“Never, Mother!” said a horrified Anne. “He is the least person I would go to in such matters. I know...I know you wish me to continue obtaining money from him – which I will do, to fund your journey to Brighton – but confiding in Mr Murdoch about such serious matters would be –”

“Alright, Anne,” pacified Mrs Lincombe. “Alright. Do not work yerself up so, it was a mere suggestion.”

Anne sat back down in her hand-sprung armchair, glum with the prospect of another meeting with Mr. Murdoch ahead of her, and the knowledge of mystery and danger outside.
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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I feel like a hypocrite reviewing your work as you're such a beautiful writer compared to me, so i'll just tell you what i think..

I love all of these chapters. I love your character development, dialogue is perfect and i love love love your description! You describe things so beautifully I can see them perfectly in my head. Fantastic imagery!

You put so many chapters up so regularly, you must be writing all day!! Now that's commitment!


is your story called Tipping the velvet? isnt there a story called that already?

Amazing work though, i look forward to reading more


- Helen x
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Hey Sarah!

Thanks for reviewing The Jane Effect , and no, it is not going to be discontinued. I just want to experiment with a different beginning in the story, to see how that goes.

Anyways, on the critique:
“Most likely. Oh Anne, I am so sorry for deceiving you in this way. I...I scarce know how you came about Tynesfield, apart from –”


I don't like "Most likely" there. It just doesn't seem to fit with this sentence.

Anne sat back down in her hand-sprung armchair, glum with the prospect of another meeting with Mr. Murdoch ahead of her, and the knowledge of mystery and danger outside.


Awe, does it have to end here? Oh well, I guess I'll have to be patient. I liked this chapter, it answered a few of the questions I had but now I'm mystified. When I read that note, it reminded of The Ruby in the Smoke which is one of my favorite books and movies since BBC adapted it. But anyways, I'm rambling, so to end this review, I'm just going to say please hurry and post the next chapter.

Cheers!

~Angel
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Hey Angel! :D
I haven't read Ruby in the Smoke, but I'll try not to make the plot too similar. :oops: That would be terrible, so I'll definately look it up to avoid clashing plotlines. Thanks for reading. xD
Thankyou for checking this out, helen. :P I appreciate it.
Thank everyone!
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Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.




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Sarah, I demand you tell me what happens next. Utterly demand it. Beyond demand, I completely order you to do so. I shall not be silenced. Fine then, I recruit Sherlock.

“Anne,

Beware of The Three Horseshoes.

You must go to Canterbury and find Gibbous.

Capeside Shipping.

Look behind the golden wrist.”

Kirsten: So, Sherlock, what do you make of this, may I ask?
Sherlock: Three Horseshoes. That could mean bad luck, or Horseshoes could be people, seeing as the word is capitalized. It could be a place, too.
Kirsten: Hm... interesting. Care you to ponder the next line?
Sherlock: Of course, my dear. You must go to Canterbury and find Gibbous. Well, Gibbous could mean bulging, or the time that the moon is more than half illuminated. Or Gibbous could be a person.
Kirsten: Remarkable, my dear Sherlock.
Sherlock: Capeside Shipping. Capeside could be the name of a company, and shipping could be the transporation of goods. Or, Capeside could be an object, so it could be shipping, the act of transporting goods, Capeside. As you would ship tea or coffee.
Kirsten: Aaaaah, your intellect is most fascinating.
Sherlock: Indeed. The next line is most...most positively baffling.
Kirsten: I quite agree dear Sherlock, quite agree.
Sherlock: Look behind the golden wrist. Well the golden wrist, could be a statue, or a monument, but no. It doesn't appear quite right...too easy, this person is trying to create an incomprehensible puzzle. Unless they are using reverse psychology.
Kirsten: Why thankyou for your time dear Sherlock. You have proved most helpful.
Sherlock: Indeed.


I loved this chapter. The grammar was impeccable as per usual. The word choice fantastic and the descriptions quite wonderful. And, worry not, myself and Sherlock shall discover the meaning. We shall !!!

*Bows and swirls*

Good day to you ma'am. *curtsy*

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Lol, thanks for the somewhat unusual critique, Kirsten. You make a fine detective. :wink:
Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.



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— Paul Simon