The Talking of Swans

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Note: Again, this is another piece that was inspirational piece that I wrote. I really like it because of what I was thinking about at the time and I love it because it's something different from what I usually write. I'd love to hear what everyone thinks about it. Please be honest because I'm entering this into BBB's contest and this is like the second song I wrote because I didn't really like the other one. And also, these were actually verses but I decided to split them up because I was thinking about how singer's take pauses in songs and it reads better without it being clumped together, so enjoy.


The Talking of Swans
By Angel of Death


Lessons don't teach itself
We're in a world where life is all
And the sun is on a broken shelf
Soon it will fall
We lean on a windowpane
Hoping it will protect us from the rain

And look at the devil's rags
Their resting in front of our souls
Waiting for us to rise the white flags
Rise them high
Rise them high
Make them touch the flaming sky

Chorus
No matter what they say
We're still here
Chase the doves away
They don't belong here
The talking of swans
Their words so beautiful
And we're their fawns
So young and useful

The day it hailed
Trinkets of gold tainted the sea
We tried to get the riches, but we failed
And now we're drifting away from reality
Nothing makes sense anymore
One day the rich will become poor

And the birds will sing
Flying away on their holy wings
They'll laugh at us and we will cry
But they won't hear us as we die
As we slip into oblivion
We shed every sin

Chorus
No matter what they say
We're still here
Chase the doves away
They don't belong here
The talking of swans
Their words are so beautiful
And we're their fawns
So young and useful
True love, in all it’s celestial charm, and
star-crossed ways, only exist in a writer’s
mind, for humans have not yet learned
how to manifest it.




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I loved this, I could feel the inspiration and as I was reading it, I just got filled with emotion. I'm usually pretty tough but this song was beautiful, I could hear it in my head as I was reading. Imagery was fantastic! Bravo!




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WarriorOfTheBrimstone: Thanks for your review! I was worried about it not sounding right but I'm glad you can hear it in your head without problems. Yeah, I get emotional every time I read this. Thanks again!

~Angel
True love, in all it’s celestial charm, and
star-crossed ways, only exist in a writer’s
mind, for humans have not yet learned
how to manifest it.




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That was... deep. I think it was way better than your other one (no offense or anything). Haha. I was considering about writing some lyrics for BBB's contest too, but after I saw yours, I'm probably not.

Anyways, good job and good luck. :D
When people don't express themselves, they die one piece at a time.



something I have been thinking about ever since I saw the Super Mario Bros movie is how once I took a "what Nintendo character are you" quiz and I got Waluigi.
— Elinor