Not one of my best pieces, just something I came up with off the top of my head. Read and enjoy!
People were chatting briefly in the parking lot or lounging on the worn down benches of the Quileute high school. Nothing looked odd or out of place. The only thing that seemed strange was the tension that filled the atmosphere, somewhere mixed between the damp breeze and heavy stench wet soil. Blayke walked up just as I shut the door of my car.
“You smell like a strawberry daiquiri,” He commented.
“And you smell like sweaty gym socks,” I countered.
His lips spread back into a huge grin, showing his perfect set of white fangs. “Touché.”
“Omni-linguist,” I muttered.
“Power absorber,” He retorted.
The wind blew a piece of my raspberry brown hair around my face, but Blayke gently pushed it behind my ear.
Oh my god, here comes the new kids. Are they holding hands? Maybe they’re dating, one girl thought enviously.
“Iris,” Blayke scolded.
“You know I can’t help it. Once I recognize the power of another vampire, I absorb it.”
He sighed and continued walking.
Mixed expressions spread about like a disease when we walked up. I didn’t need Jasper’s powers the see the envy in their tiny human eyes. Some were shocked – genuinely and absolutely traumatized; their jaws dropped open and eyes wide with in astonishment. Others were bursting with jealousy, or at least trying to cover up their jealousy with disinterest – a clear case of sour grapes. I tried to ignore it and concentrated on Blayke’s hand.
“Mmmm…Do you think Aro would mind if I had a little snack?” He grinned impishly, running his tongue across his razor sharp teeth.
I bumped my shoulder into his playfully; a typical human action. “Of course he would mind. We’re here to spy on them, not to eat them.”
A girl and boy whispered as they approached us bravely. When they reached us, they smiled.
“Hi!” The girl exclaimed. “I’m Allie and this is Mark. We’re the welcoming committee.”
Wow. They're gorgeous, Allie thought.
Well hhheeeellllloooo, beautiful, Mark thought.
“Hello Allie. Mark.” I tried to smile warmly as I nodded to them, but it came out as a flirtatious smirk.
“I’m Blayke, and this is Iris. We’re from Italy,” Blayke replied smoothly in an appropriate Italian accent.
“Ciao,” Mark purred. I should’ve guessed; she looks mighty fine in those designer clothes.
“Ciao,” I answered seductively.
“What part of Italy do you come from?” Allie asked.
“Volterra,” I answered eerily.
My tone abruptly shifted Allie’s mood to fear, but Mark was too engrossed with my low cut shirt. “I have relatives from Si-Sicily,” She stuttered.
“How nice,” I hissed hypnotically.
Blayke squeezed my hand harder. You’re scaring her, Iris.
I put on my best friendly smile. “Well, we’re going to be late for Spanish, but it was nice meeting you.”
“Yes, thank you for welcoming us so warmly,” Blayke added.
“Sure thing,” Allie answered.
“If you need anything, don’t hesitate to ask.” I couldn’t help but notice the other meaning behind his remark.
Blayke tugged me away.
“I think that went well,” I stated cheerfully.
“Yeah. Well,” He snorted.
“What?” I questioned.
Blayke cocked his head and arched an eyebrow. You looked like you wanted to lick their skin off.
“Don’t say you didn’t because I already know.” I tapped the temple of my head smugly.
He sighed. “Alright. Let’s just find someone to recruit and get the hell out of here."
Blayke sniffed the air. "That's strange. It smelled a heck of a lot better outside.”
I stopped in the middle of the hallway, pulling Blayke to a halt with me.
“Blayke,” I said quietly. “I haven’t had a vision yet.”
“Maybe you haven’t been around Alice long enough,” He assured me soothingly.
“No, Blayke. Bella must’ve put a block on Aro’s thoughts.”
“Why would she do that?” He pondered.
“I don’t know, but I know why it smells a heck of a lot better outside.”
A huge boy with long hair and coffee colored skin approached us. His thoughts were spread across his face in an evil grin.
“Hey leeches, I’m Jacob Black. I think we’re going to be real great friends.”
- End.
Second, I was a little confused when I read this-you might want to remind the readers that vampires have special powers. Just like, ...he retorted, referring to my gift. Or something.
) instead of using the Cullens or the werewolves, and you blended those characters in well. So kudos. Besides my comments above, the only other thing I have to say is that your story was a lot of dialogue. Obviously, everyone who is going to read this will already know about the Volturi and werewolves and etc. But we don't know anything about Blayke and Iris, so some character backstory might be in order. Then again, as a short piece this worked well. If you were to continue it, though, I'd want to know a lot more about the characters.
