Exodus

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In the 27th century, an anomaly causes the moon to gradually set itself on a collision course with Earth, destroying all life on Earth. Predicting this catastrophe, Humankind prepares itself to leave the Earth in a genesis ark, a city sized spacecraft capable of holding life forever, to look for a new home. Only the most deserving and useful were brought on board, however.

The exodus, as it became known, went well for two centuries-since then, most of the first generation have died out, though a few still remain (Human lifespans increased dramatically in the third millenium), along with many of the second and third generations. Reproduction has been heavily regulated-the population of the genesis ark has never been more than three thousand. As such, there have only been five generations so far, though the age differences within each of those generations can be anything up to one hundred years.
However, on the 217th year of the Exodus, people have started dying for no apparent reason. Numbers of deaths were low at first, but they have been increasing. At the current death rate, the genesis ark will be devoid of life long before it reaches its first potential new home.
Panicking, many passengers have come up with a number of theories about the deaths. One group blame the deaths on an undetectable virus, and have locked themselves away from the rest of the ship, rationing their supplies and stealing food from the rest of the ship when their stock runs low. Another group believes that someone is attempting to end the Human race by murdering the passengers, one by one. They have grown suspicious of every one, and carry weapons where ever they go.
These two factions, known respectively as Uppers (after the area of the ship they have taken over) and Guns (after their tendency to carry weapons around where ever they go) make up the majority of the ship's population, with only the few police aboard the ship keeping them from turning the last hope of Humanity into a battleground. It is only a matter of time, however, before they break the rules.

And the mysterious deaths are becoming more and more frequent...

No more than two characters each please, keep this sensible! No magic is allowed here. You can be creative when thinking about future technologies which your character might possess, but try not to go over the top-think, is it feasible? If so, why would the character possess this technology?

Most importantly, keep this PG-13!

Name: try to choose something similar to a modern day name, but warped slightly due to the changing times.
Gender: obvious
Generation: 1st, 2nd, 3rd, 4th or 5th. Remember that only the 1st generation were born on Earth-the rest have spent their entire lives on the ship.
Age: Maximum age is 300. If you are first generation you must be at least 217 years old.
Appearance: Provide a picture if you wish, or use your awesome descriptive skills to conjure the exact same image in everyone's head to that in your head. Or, if you're like me, you can give a vague description and let the others use their vast imagination to best effect.
Personality: muckle
History: What has your character been doing up until the deaths? If s/he is first generation, what did they do before the exodus, and how were they worthy of being accepted onto the ship?
Allegiance: Upper, Gun, Authorities (usually a member of the ship's crew) or Other (if Other please state and explain)
Other: Anything else of interest

So, to start off, my character, the ship's Captain:

Name: Jamis Evon Junior
Gender: Male
Generation: 2nd
Age: 93 years old.
Appearance: Has the appearance of a thirty year old man with long(ish) blonde hair, blue eyes and fair, slightly freckly skin. His hands and head are nearly as much machine as they are organic, with special sockets implanted so that he can perform the countless tasks a space captain of the late third millenium has to perform. Apart from that, he has insisted on keeping a natural appearance, though he has undergone several surgical operations to keep his youthful appearance, like most people of his age and over.
Personality: Friendly and well-wishing, many wonder if he is perhaps too kind and carefree to be the ship's highest authority. He does show a serious side at times, however, and has been known to be merciless to those who would be hostile towards him. Since becoming captain, he has taken his job very seriously, rapidly drifting away from his old friends. He tends to think in terms of "what is right" rather than "what can be done".
History: Jamis, the son of Captain Jamis Senior, was raised from birth to be his father's successor as Captain, and highest authority, of the genesis ark. As such, he was well prepared to lead the ship in the search for a new home twenty three years ago, when Jamis Senior died of a stroke. Since then, he has received mixed criticisms from the passengers and crew of his ship-some admire his friendly nature, while others think he is too carefree to be leading the remainders of Humanity.
With the rising number of deaths, Jamis has made it the ship's crew's priority to discover the cause of the deaths, and then to prevent the deaths from continuing. He is also looking for a successor for the post of Captain.
Allegiance: Authority (he is the authority!)
Other: up for love, his cybernetic implants in his hands give him a powerful punch, though some particularly strong Humans can throw much stronger punches. As Captain, he has access to the ship's armoury, and rarely goes anywhere without a pistol.
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Save my place !!
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Your place is saved. That reminds me, the story will start when a few people have joined (probably five or so), but I'll keep the storybook open for new characters for a while after the story begins. You can join in whenever.
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Name: Remi O'Haren

Gender: Female

Generation: 5th

Age: 27

Appearance:
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Personality: Calm and organized, Remi is a follower who does her job right. Set her to a task and she'll do directly as asked. Sometimes her temper gets in the way.

History: Before the recent deaths Remi's been making and repairing machinery of all sorts. She's a self-made mechanic who built weapons and Exodus parts. Now, after the deaths, she builds weapons, transportation, security, anything the Guns need.

Allegiance: Gun

Other:
-Remi's left leg was caught in machinery when she was young, ripped it clean off. As a result her left leg is totally made up of metal. A computer chip implanted into her spine senses the brains intentions and allows for her to move smoothly. The downside is that she can't be as flexible as she'd like.

-Up for love
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Your generation and age do match up. The maximum age of each generation should be as follows:

Generation 2: 217 (note that this would be the result of their parent being pregnant just prior to the exodus)
Generation 3: 185
Generation 4: 169
Generation 5: 153

Because people in the late 3rd millenium can continue to reproduce, and be happy to do so, until they are well over 100 or 200, it is perfectly feasible for a member of Generation 2 to be much younger than a member of Generation 5. The only generation which has a minimum age attached to it is Generation 1, because they were alive before the exodus, so they must be 217 years old.
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I'm doing this. It's my first story book and my first sci-fi, so it must be good. :P
Name: Cael Hammett
Gender: Male
Generation: 3rd
Age: 90
Appearance: Tall, solid (which means he's a lot of muscle, and some fat, but it's hard fat. Packed-in fat), bronze hair, light brown eyes, fair skin. He has a lot of scars, which look like they could be battle scars, but they're not (in the History section...).
Personality: Cael's a sweetheart, but a little rough around the edges. He is extremely protective of his friends, loved ones, and extremely offensive to anyone else who may or may not be thinking bad thoughts about them (it only matters if Cael thinks they bear some ill will) and has a tendency to act before thinking. He also has a tendency to speak in metaphors, much to the confusion of everyone else. He's also kind of a chauvinist. But not in a "females aren't as good as males" sort of way, more in a "males should take care of things for the females, because they're too delicate" kind of way.
History: Cael, as a child, was a skinny, weak little boy, and got picked on a lot, and grew up to be tall and solid and capable of standing up for himself. So he has stood up for himself, a little too much, but it's never really landed him in serious trouble. He grew up with his grandfather after his mother was killed by a paranoid trigger-happy future-Gun (does that make sense) who was punished by whatever means the ship has to punish people, but not for life, since it was an accident. He never knew who is father was. Anyway, his grandfather taught him how everything on the ship worked, mechanically and socially. As a result, not only is Cael a skilled mechanic/carpenter, he also has a sense about how people and people's bodies work. Which will be useful.
I'm foreshadowing, but to what, I am not yet sure.
Allegiance: Authority (ship mechanic)
Other: His favorite dessert is peach cobbler.

Man, that was way too indepth and probably didn't make sense to anyone but me.
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kissthewitch wrote:He grew up with his grandfather after his mother was killed by a paranoid trigger-happy future-Gun (does that make sense)


You mean a man who became a Gun due to his paranoia?

Anyway, this is good, we'll start when we have a couple of characters in each of the main factions.
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OOhh! *claps hands* This should be fun!


Name: Alexis (Alex) Greggor

Gender: Female

Generation:5th

Age: 23

Personality: Guarded, keeps to herself, but opens up when around people she thinks she can trust. She has lived on this ship all her life, but longs to be somewhere else. She feels claustrophobic, and is desperate to get to the moon. (that is her major weakness, she will do ANYTHING to get off this ark)

History: Grew up on the ship, both her parents died from whatever was killing off people. She grew up on her own.

Allegiance: Guns.

Other: up for love.

Appearance:
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Face Engine wrote:
kissthewitch wrote:He grew up with his grandfather after his mother was killed by a paranoid trigger-happy future-Gun (does that make sense)


You mean a man who became a Gun due to his paranoia?

Anyway, this is good, we'll start when we have a couple of characters in each of the main factions.

Yes. Since his mother was killed before the 217th year, he wasn't a Gun yet, but when the Guns formed he became one.
I think that's what you said, but I just wanted to make it clear.
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Name: Elsbree (Bree) Redion

Gender: Female

Generation: 5th

Age: 21

Personality: a very quiet girl who doesn't have many friends, she lives with her mother and Grandfather. Her grandfather, being of the 1st generation, tells her stories of the earth and how it was when he was a boy. She longs to be there, no matter how terrible the conditions of it were. She frequently wishes she had been born centuries earlier. She is also a very lonely individual, she longs for friends but has none due to her shy nature. Her favorite thing to do after a trying day is play old songs on her battered keyboard that was once her father's.

History: Her parents were very much in love when she was born, but when she was fifteen her father went a bit nuts and locked himself away with the uppers. She misses him very much and longs to see him again. When this happened her mother was left completely broken-hearted and has been a wreck ever since.

Allegiance: Guns

Other: She wants very much to fall in love

Appearance: Has large dark brown eyes and pale skin. Her hair is always a frizzy mess no matter what she does to it and she usually has an inquisitive look on her face that is often misread as boredom.

*this is going to be a great story! such a great idea! :D *
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Name: James Gates

Gender: male

Generation: 5th

Age: 21

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Personality: kind and well being, James is that guy that is nice to everyone.

History: James lived with his parents untill the got murdered, he found them in his room hanging from the ceiling, he nether knew who did it. Now he acts like the nice and is very protective of his friends

Allegiance: Gun, as he likes to protect the well- beings of overs

Other: up for love. Likes chinese dumplings.
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This is good, however we need some characters in the Upper faction.
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Name: Jamie Lorough
Gender: Male
Generation: 5th
Age: 25
Appearance: http://Dingbat142001.deviantart.com/art ... p-98213879
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Personality: Is very cautious of everyone he meets and feels he can trust no one. He isn't exactly mad, but he views himself that way.
History: Jamie's family has always served on the ship as doctors and always the best. He is one of the best surgeons on the ship and whenever someone is hurt they come to him. He is the head surgeon and specializes in neurology, plastic surgery, trauma, and organ replacements. He has recently had too many people come into his hospital dead, people he couldn't save. There are usually a few deaths in a doctor's life on the exodus, but he has never witnessed so many. Overwhelmed, he then disappeared into the dark shelter of the Uppers.
Allegiance: Upper
Other: Is up for love.

Name: Kitty Penson
Generation: 5th
Age: 20
Appearance: http://iDNAR.deviantart.com/art/CG-Girl-32-17064600 (normal)
http://fantasmica.deviantart.com/art/Wi ... d-62091898 (ready to shoot :wink:)
Personality: Is very outspoken and doesn't like to be controlled by anyone. She is very rebellious and wary of those around her. KittyShe trusts no one and she herself cannot be trusted.
History: Her family, meaning her father, died with the deaths. Her mother died when giving birth to her, which was the only recorded death by child birth on the exodus. Her mother named her Kitty, because she now she fears she is next.
She helps with the mechanics on the ship and creates new technology within the agriculture field, like new ways to grow food and such. She also helps with fitness technology, so people will exercise and eat right. She was very active within the community, but after her father died everything changed for her. She can't accept her father's death and thinks of nothing else.
She carries a laser-taser with her at all times. It works by pointing the laser at a desired target and pulling the trigger to release the taser. She created this herself and it was the first weapon she had ever created. The downside is that it paralyzes whoever is around the person, but very slightly affects the person who uses it. She carries this weapon sheathed on her hip always.
Allegiance: Gun
Other: Up for love
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Name: Zander Greggor

Gender: Male

Generation: 5th

Age: 21

Appearance: http://demonicangel-bayou.deviantart.co ... y-40844733 (Without the bar code :P)

Personality: Trusts no one and cannot be trusted mostly. Very kind and helping to his small circle of friends, but only to them.

History: His parents were expert engineers, and the talent seemed to pass down to him. He used to do nothing and just hang around until both his mother and father were killed. Afterward he joined the guns and started to help as an engineer, bringing in new technology and secrets to the guns.

Allegiance: Guns, but will desert them if needed.

Other: Up for love, doesn't matter which Allegiance.
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*grabs a spot* Will post bio ASAP.

Here are my people:

Name: Yuming Shuang
Gender: female
Generation: 2nd
Age: 197
Appearance: Looks around 27 with the surgeries. Chinese, with long black hair and dark eyes. Keeps her hair down, but when working puts it in a ponytail.
http://kashigi.deviantart.com/art/Chinese-Girl-Oekaki-23415748
Personality: Sweet and motherly, but detached. Scared to love because of the disease that is killing everyone. Loves music. Plays a few instruments: saxophone, violin, piano, etc. Likes to play music with other people.
History: Mother - Cho - and father - Ru - died of old age. Learned musically abilities from them. Has pictures of them in her bedroom. She's an only child.
Allegiance: Authority (doctor-like figure)
Other: Up for love

Name: Narcis Hadad
Gender: male
Generation: 4th
Age: 166
Appearance: Looks 45ish. Dark skin and blue eyes. Small mustache and chin hair.
http://sekoul.deviantart.com/art/Profile-of-a-Black-Man-50257148
Personality: Annoyed at everybody, lashes out when mad, hard and mean.
History: Was happy until his wife, Carys, died of disease. Ever since he's been mean and rude to anybody especially women.
Allegiance: Uppers
Other: maybe up for love
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