Smoke it then Leave it (Heavy Metal)

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Smoke it then Leave it


(In the back round you hear people puffing and sniffing cocaine)


First person (High and calm voice):

The lonely teen makes a puff…
He really enjoys the stuff…
He thinks that this is okay…
But he doesn’t know that his pouring blood will decay

Second person (Roaring sounds):
HEAVY


The kid says to him self the same old shit!
But he doesn’t do about it a little bit!!
He keeps calming him self down!
He says……
Smoke it then leave it!!!
(Screaming in the back round)
But he doesn’t do about it a little bit!!!!

First person (High and calm voice):

The child can’t quit
His head starts to pound and he throws a fit
He just wants it more
What for, What for?
The weed did its deed
(Little drum solo)
The teen is now its Romeo



Second person (Roaring sounds):
HEAVY



The kid needs it more, more and more!
He will kick the floor!!
Because he wants more, more and more!!!!!!!!!!!!!
He runs to the pack!
To grab his weed stack!
He grabs his lighter with his trembling hands!
But the pack slips and falls where he stands!!
The kid grabs it and cries!!!
He can’t even surmise!!!
He bites the pack and starts to eat the weed!!!!!
That is his only need!!!

The kid says to him self the same old shit!
But he doesn’t do about it a little bit!!
He keeps calming him self down!
He says……
Smoke it then leave it!!!
(Screaming in the back round)
But he doesn’t do about it a little bit!!!!


SAD BUT SUPER HEAVY SOLO
First person (High and calm voice):


The kid promises the same old things…
Only drums play
But when he tries his Juliet weed stings!
Only drums play
Now he failed…
Only drums play
Now he ailed…


Second person (Roaring sounds):

The kid says to him self the same old shit!
But he doesn’t do about it a little bit!!
He keeps calming him self down!
He says……
Smoke it then leave it!!!
(Screaming in the back round)
But he doesn’t do about it a little bit!!!!
Last edited by lordgluzman on Sun Feb 15, 2009 7:26 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Wow. Powerful stuff. Not the weed, the song lyrics. :roll:

I think that this is really good. You should play it or something like that.

Your lyrics are always very good. *applause in the background* :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
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Hey!

I really liked your song!!! :D Of course, I love all your songs. You have skill, especially when it comes to writing songs well :) I respect all songs with a meaningful purpose.

It's got a great message: LOOSE THE WEED! It'll take you straight to hell, or would most likely contribute to your ticket there. Hell is certainly no place I want to find myself in the end. Pain and misery is not luxury.

Keep it realistic people! BE SMART and don't throw your life away with drugs. It's not worth the pain cause' when you hurt yourself, you hurt everyone else that knows you. It true, whether you admit it or not :shock: I've seen it

Just listen to the Lordgluzman!! :D

that's all I have to say...

...until next time,
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Thank You guys for your support!
Blood is red
But Heaven is blue
The Devil will fined out
And take you




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Wow... This is so angry. Weed is bad, not to mention illegal.
What I liked about this was that it played out like a story. You have the beginning, middle, and end. But you leave it at an open ending (personally, I like that, but some people don't). Keep it up.
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Wonderful, you might be well on your way to being a composer someday-if you keep writing works like this.

I listen to opera and symphonies and...symphonic rock (Nightwish anyone?). That being said, I could only picture and hear this as though it were a symphony of sorts. Hearing it like that, it sounded pretty well. And if this was not the song genre in which it was intended to come across, then bravo for you, because that would mean it works out in more ways then one.

The lyrics, well the message rather, was attractive throughout. I especially liked it because in the operas you have the dramatic highs and lows and with your subject matter here (weed and the use thereof) you have the lofty highs and the crushing lows as you come down from aforementioned highs.

But perhaps its better said this way: I liked this piece.

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I love Nightwish! Are you from Finland by any chance? Because Nightwish is a Finnish band.
Blood is red
But Heaven is blue
The Devil will fined out
And take you



here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings