becoming me

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Will someone tell me what is happening to me?
Why am I so misunderstood?
Why can't they see that I'm caught between the
world's eyes and the person that I want to be.
They say that I'll be beautiful but only in their eyes.
I asked if they believed in beauty on the inside.
They looked at me as if I were crazy, turned up their noses,
and walked away.


Awesome.


I'm going crazy with these push me pull me
copycats who think they're right.
I don't want to give in and get knocked off of my feet.
I don't want to be the someone that they want me to be.
The moral of the story is they think they're right.


I must follow my own light.




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I liked the message. How many times have I felt that way?
Your stanzas were a bit choppy, and the rhythm was a little off. You should also work on your grammar. In the first stanza, you put a period where you should have had a question mark, and you missed a few commas. But other than those small things, you're poem was pretty good.
"You can love someone so much...But you can never love people as much as you can miss them."



He who has a why to live for can bear almost any how.
— Fredrich Nietzche (Philosopher)