Beacons in the Night

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Country winds blow softly across an open field.
Thin strands of fresh grass sway from side to side,
Illuminated by a rich blue sky.
Nature’s endless cloak, spanning beyond the horizon.
And scattered throughout this eternal backdrop,
Lies stars.
A heavenly mirage upon an earthly canvas.
Beacons of silver fire, casting forth their light into the deep darkness,
Burning for all of time.

Two years ago I returned to that very field.
Where the thin grass swayed from the country wind.
But in its place,
Lied concrete.
Cement,
Wood,
Steel.
A town,
Lighted by rows of streetlights,
By the bright, florescent glow of a gas station.
I looked up into the night sky.
Searching for the stars I had once gazed upon.
There were none.
Where once twilight fires sparkled in the night.
There was only darkness.
Where once a masterpiece was gloriously displayed in the sky,
There lied only the blank canvas.
Where once stars vigorously cast their light,
There were none.
Last edited by J.C. Belding on Sat Nov 29, 2008 10:20 am, edited 1 time in total.
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I really liked this. I'm not entirely sure if I missed any hidden meanings, but I found this poem to be a good representation of the problems Humanity has caused the world. By urbanising the Earth, we're destroying it.

I can't see a lot to criticise. One teeny weeny thing, though, is there's no full stop/comma at the end of the eighth line.
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I liked this very much. I liked it because it is something that is happening in modern time. All of the stars are staring to dissappear and I liked how you pointed that out. That is basically what this poem is aiming towards. Great job! I give it an A+! Keep writing.
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