Dream

Have you ever hugged someone you loved before?

Wrapped your arms around them tight and
pressed yourself against their body in the heat of the moment?

Your lovers body beckoning at the
stroke of her hair and the gentle brush of the nipple.

Her bosom excited and agitated by the caresses of your hand.

She is liberated by the very sound of your voice
whispered softly in her ear,
drawn to the poetry of the eloquent words you speak.

Suddenly the world stops.

The wind swirls around you and
envelopes you as your body is entwined interconnected.

You feel loved.

You feel a comfort and warmth you've been yearning for,
a tingling sensation that courses through your body
letting you know that you are needed and deeply cherished.

Boy doesn't it feel good to know that someone
needs and wants you just as much as you want them.

That's the beauty of love.
This is art in the making of something golden and beautiful.

That's the beauty of love.

This is art in the making of something golden and beautiful.

I loved this line. This was really the only line that I seriously payed attention to.

Your lovers body beckoning at the

stroke of her hair and the gentle brush of the nipple.



Her bosom excited and agitated by the caresses of your hand.

Okay, this is the part where I almost peed my pants. I am an immature fourteen yearold and this just tore me to pieces with laughter! But it was still good. Again, you have amazed me with your writing!

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Have you ever hugged someone you loved before?

Wrapped your arms around them tight and
pressed yourself against their body in the heat of the moment?

No I haven't
Really like the beginning.

Your lovers body beckoning at the
stroke of her hair and the gentle brush of the nipple.

Her bosom excited and agitated by the caresses of your hand.

Very deep and... Also add an apostrophe: lover's. Sorry I'm a spelling and punctuation freak

You feel a comfort and warmth you've been yearning for,
a tingling sensation that courses through your body
letting you know that you are needed and deeply cherished.

Very nice. I like this. Explains to me what love is. Very well thought out.

Boy doesn't it feel good to know that someone
needs and wants you just as much as you want them.

I'd put a comma after Boy. Gives that little pause, you know?

I like it(Duh) you really have a unique writing style.

[quote="XavierJohnson123"]
Her bosom excited and agitated by the caresses of your hand.

[/quote] I loved this qoute. It explains it so well. I am only 15, but I know what it is like, you captrued it so beautifully.

[quote] She is liberated by the very sound of your voice
whispered softly in her ear,
drawn to the poetry of the eloquent words you speak. [/quote]
This is another one I liked. I just love the way you wrote this. It was beautifully written and you captured it beautifully!

Write more and let me know when you do. I want to read more!!!

Shayde

Very nicely done. You describe the art of loving somone well. You show that when you love someone this deeply that it makes you feel loved as well. This is a great point that many writers miss.

[/quote]The wind swirls around you and
envelopes you as your body is entwined interconnected.

I love this line because it brings the image of two people so in love that they are completely entwined as one instead of two.