Loves curse

His heary and soul destroyed, and broken

But its his own fault he fell for the token.

She was beauty and he the beast, they were destined to fall

for they were not of this world,...not at all to say the least!

He was faithful and trusting, and his adoration knew no bounds,

But oh how she trampled his heart to dust, now he knows no action that

reqeust his trust.

Thought to be forgoten and was for a while,

He found a new hope and now begins the trial!!!!!



Stay tuned for the next update on my dear fallen angel!!!! this is a neverending

battle

Haahah reminds me a bit of D.N.Angel or other video games lol nice done keep it up I especially like how you linked the words together. Well done I will wait for the sequel DUN DUN DUN it better live up to my expectations haha jk another thing you might want to be careful of is how space out your writing is.

I really loved it. It was simple and yet still captivating. Wonderful job with linking the words together!! Very nice.

She was beauty and he the beast, they were destined to fall



for they were not of this world,...not at all to say the least!

Had to be my favorite part. Really loved the last part though the best ^_^ Please continue with this and let me know when you do update it!!

No comment... well maybe this one: Awsome

He was faithful and trusting, and his adoration knew no bounds,



But oh how she trampled his heart to dust,

Have you lived through this, because it's a very accurate description

it sounds like it could more more complex

and grammar oh dear!

well done though

the next one - - can't wait

Amazing poem! I especially love the line:

She was beauty and he the beast, they were destined to fall

It's such a beautiful, encapturing line! Well done on this poem. Just one thing- spelling lol! It's great other than that

Is it a personale experience? It sounds like something you've experience yourself due to the precise description.

Yeah, this was really well written. I enjoyed the drama that you created and the emotions pouring from it.

Well Done

My only worry is that sometimes, the wording is awkward. If you read this out loud, you'll see what I mean.

A little tweaking here and there will tidy it up.

Otherwise, Keep Writing!

He was faithful and trusting, and his adoration knew no bounds,

But oh how she trampled his heart to dust, now he knows no action that

request his trust.




>who is the fallen angel, anyway?
>it's just so confusing that one can continue loving someone, without even realizing the bitter truth.
>how cruel is the girl, anyway?..