Whenever

I see you walkin' on by
I know I can't stop this feelin'
Something inside me comes alive
I know I can't hide
I'm fallin' over and over again

Whenever you're near me I can't breathe
Whenever you speak to me I believe
That you are more than I ever dreamed of
And you must be sent from God up above

Now when the day is done I'm all alone
I pray that you can hear me
I don't know why
but I can't stop fallin' over and over again

Whenever you're near me I can't breathe
Whenever you speak to me I believe
That you are more than I ever dreamed of
And you must be sent from God up above

What is this feeling
I can't feel the ground
I'm finding myself wrapped in your arms

Whenever you're near me I can't breathe
Whenever you speak to me I believe
That you are more than I ever dreamed of
And you must be sent from God up above

Whenever... I believe
That you are more than I ever dreamed of
And you must be sent from God up above

Hey, okay well I wrote this about a year ago and I really don't know what rhythm and beat it can go to. So if you have any suggestions on how to make it better please post it. Thanks!

This would actually be a good song. It has the right format and if you sang it, probably soprano, I bet it would sound really good. Girls can really relate to this when they have a crush, so good job! I love the falling over line and everything else.

I liked this. It was pretty, and I can relate to it.

It would be nice if it was a song too. For the poem part though, a little more punctuation wouldn't hurt.
Singing it as a song would be pretty. It would have to be slow to truly grasp what you are saying.

What is this feeling
I can't feel the ground
I'm finding myself wrapped in your arms

I love that line! Good job!

I enjoyed reading this, when i saw it on the front page and read it, i thought that it was a song. Couldn't figure out a steady tempo for it, though. It would be a pretty song.

I couldn't find many grammatical errors. You could do with a little more punctuation if it's staying a poem; i couldn't say for lyrics, I'm not quite sure on the rules for that. But like i said, i think alot of people can relate to this and I actively enjoyed reading it. :]

Thanks! I wrote this when I was falling for a guy that I had no chance with whatsoever. So I'm glad you all like it. And I was writing it for the purpose of a song, but I have no clue what rhythm to put it to. And I'll work on punctuation when I get a chance. Once again thank you very much!