Preface For my story Whitefire( re-written)

So there I was thiking as I was about to get ran over by a red truck in the middle of popular Los Angeles, California.
So many things went through my head. First, I was trying to think of a good excuse on why I was going to survive the crash of the sixteen wheeler truck, at the same time I was rembering that I was alone.
Alone trying to stop the mortal world from rottingand dying falling all together.
Besides the fact that I was about to be run over, and that the driver would get more hurt than me with the amazingly abnormal strength that is within me and the very pale skin that shined in the moonlight that night. More Importantly I was thinking about my father Jacob. He was over at the second dimesion in the city of Whitefire his kingdom, quietly watching over his only daughter like a creeping shadow in the night. He used to tell me how much I am like my mother, Rosella, who gave her life trying to save me.
She succeded, but in doing so she gave her immortality up to the council of the great law she had not been aware of. Well lets see Whitefire my great city, so far away from it but yet I felt so close
I gave up the life of a princess in Whitefire to come here and save this rotting world, and fight alone against our enemies of Blackfire. The enemies were trying to destroy the world and use its space.
That's what my father, the great, immortal king Jacob had told me. He had been born as everything; a Warlock, Vampire, Shapeshifter, and some other things he refused to tell me. I inherited most of this traits from my parents.My mother, the former Queen Rosella-- who was also a Witch and Vampiress with the heart of a warrior-- gave her life for me when she renounced her powers to me at my birth. My father will not tell me anything about her and why she is not here anymore. He only tells me to always carry a memory of her in my heart.One week has passed since I came to Los Angeles, and I am still trying to figure out if I can do all of this. I walked the streets, camouflaged as a human deep in thought when I was temporarily blinded by the bright lights if the truck.
One week has passed since I came to Los Angeles, and I am still trying to figure out if I can do all of this. I walked the streets, camouflaged as a human deep in thought when I was temporarily blinded by the bright lights if the truck.I was trying to sort out all of my problems in those milliseconds; the troubles spinning through my head, the truck beeping, people shouting at me to move. Yes I just stood there still.
Only 3 seconds until

Hey Mayu. [:<

So, there I was thiking [thinking] as I was about to get ran over by a red truck in the middle of popular Los Angeles, California.

[s]So [/s][Don't repeat words, or try not to. It's redundant.] Many things went through my head. First, I was trying to think of a good excuse on why I was going to survive the crash of the sixteen wheeler truck. [Period here, instead of a comma.] At the same time, I was rembering that I was alone.

Alone trying to stop the mortal world from rottingand [Rotting and, 'and' are separate words. But, I'm sure you knew that already.] dying falling all together. ?[This sentence is a fragment. Rephrase it. You can try: I was companionless trying to stop the mortal world from rotting and falling all together]

Besides the fact that I was about to be run over, and that the driver would get more hurt than me with the amazingly abnormal strength that is within me and the very pale skin that shined in the moonlight that night. [This is a run-on sentence. Try breaking it down.]

More importantly, I was thinking about my father, Jacob.

He was over at the second dimesion in the city of Whitefire, his kingdom. [Period.] Jacob was quietly watching over his only daughter like a creeping shadow in the night. He used to tell me how much I am like my mother, Rosella, who gave her life trying to save me.

Sorry, but that's as far as I am going to go with correcting your errors.
It's giving me a headache.XD
There's quite a few mistakes in your pre-face, but it can be fixed if you put your time in it.

So there I was thiking as I was about to get ran over by a red truck in the middle of popular Los Angeles, California.

First of all, "thinking" is spelled wrong, and it is most embarrassing to have a spelling error on the first line of a story. Also: this beginning is not strong, it is worded awkwardly, and it does not entice me to read on.

First, I was trying to think of a good excuse on why I was going to survive the crash of the sixteen wheeler truck, at the same time I was rembering that I was alone.

Change on to for. Spell remembering correctly. Re-word this entire sentence. It doesn't flow.

Alone trying to stop the mortal world from rottingand dying falling all together.

Space between rotting and. And what about "dying falling". What is that supposed to mean? Again, re-word so that the reader understands what you are trying to say.

Besides the fact that I was about to be run over, and that the driver would get more hurt than me with the amazingly abnormal strength that is within me and the very pale skin that shined in the moonlight that night.

*takes a deep breath and prays silently* Okay, this is wearing a little thin. The entire sentence above is not only incorrect, but it is also corny. You put "besides" as the first word of this sentence, making the words that follow part of a dependent clause. You made it an incomplete sentence by not putting the rest of the sentence after the clause.

Also, up until this point, there is no mystery, no intrigue, nothing to suggest that the character about to be plowed down is special in anyway; and then you put this "abnormal strength that is within me and the very pale skin that shined in the moonlight that night" stuff, that not only sounds wrong, but makes the reader uncomfortable.

More Importantly I was thinking about my father Jacob.

Here is how it should be:

More importantly, I was thinking about my father, Jacob.

'Kay?

He was over at the second dimesion in the city of Whitefire his kingdom, quietly watching over his only daughter like a creeping shadow in the night.

Comma after dimension. Comma after Whitefire. How is California connected with "the second dimension, the city of Whitefire"? Or does that come later? (I'm critiquing this as I go.)

She succeded, but in doing so she gave her immortality up to the council of the great law she had not been aware of.

Succeeded is spelled wrong. This sentence is really confusing. I have no idea what is going on.

Well lets see Whitefire my great city, so far away from it but yet I felt so close
I gave up the life of a princess in Whitefire to come here and save this rotting world, and fight alone against our enemies of Blackfire.

The beginning of this sentence does not match the tone of the paper. Also, you are missing a comma after "well" and another comma or a colon after "let's", and also an apostrophe in "let's". And this is a make-shift explanation. Really brief and lacking detail.

That's what my father, the great, immortal king Jacob had told me. He had been born as everything; a Warlock, Vampire, Shapeshifter, and some other things he refused to tell me. I inherited most of this traits from my parents.My mother, the former Queen Rosella-- who was also a Witch and Vampiress with the heart of a warrior-- gave her life for me when she renounced her powers to me at my birth. My father will not tell me anything about her and why she is not here anymore. He only tells me to always carry a memory of her in my heart.

Again, awkward wording and a little confusing. Your readers can't read your mind, you know. If they could, no one would ever write books.

One week has passed since I came to Los Angeles, and I am still trying to figure out if I can do all of this. I walked the streets, camouflaged as a human deep in thought when I was temporarily blinded by the bright lights if the truck.

This is better. It's getting to the present and to the main problem.

the troubles spinning through my head, the truck beeping, people shouting at me to move. Yes I just stood there still.
Only 3 seconds until

What the heck?

This was really confusing. There were so many errors, it wasn't even funny. Like the person who posted a review above me, I now need some Tylenol for my headache.

The overall idea is good and fairly original, but it does not fit the criteria of a prologue, and it needs a lot of work. Just try to remember that you need to completely explain yourself to your readers.

Revise it again, and I'll bet it'll be better. Good luck.