Poetry Fight

Poetry Fight

You say I can’t write,
Come on, let’s fight.
Let’s use our pencils as swords
Go on, cast your wards.
It’s a battle of words.

Get ready, set, go,
This is a competition, you know.
That’s all you got?
Your poetry can rot,
Mine’s certainly better than yours.

I’ll be a good sport
And not take you to court,
For wasting that tree
Because paper isn’t free
And that eraser isn’t either.

Maybe with time,
Your poetry will be fine,
But now it needs serious work
And in the shadows it should lurk
Until it’s bearable

Haha!

Good job, Kaylyn. I really like that! It all worked nice together and it can be very true.
Good job again!

Thanks!

This poem was good. who were you writing to ... it seemed as if you were really in a war with someone... i know exactlly how you feel. The peom really shows that you spent time thinking (or maybe not... like poets do).... and this make me feel better to know i'm not alone... in my poem wars of course... thankx for being my ally

Well, at first it was. But then I wanted to make it a bit comedic.

I love this immensely. It made me giggle. Though, I suddenly felt the need to challenge you. *giggles*

Ah yes, years of playing sports suddenly comes into play. I get way too competitive.

ANYway, this isn't about my stupid horomones...or emotions (something like that) it's about how your poem rocks my socks...that sounds really weird.

Keep writing!

--
Risa out

This wouldn't happen to be about me, would it?

WOAH...

What can I say? It was funny (for sure.)
It was different.
It was... well GREAT.

But it sounded like a rap

weird

Hee hee

Maybe with time,
Your poetry will be fine,
But now it needs serious work
And in the shadows it should lurk
Until it’s bearable

in shadows it should lurk... he hee, instant classic.

Oh ho ho!!

That's very original Kaylyn, very fresh and very chirpy!

The dialogues are so spontaneous an does not sound forced at all, the rhymes fit in perfectly.

A really nice idea!!

Galerius, all I can say is thanks. You were a part of my inspiration. But no its not all about you. My competitive nature kicked in.

Thanks for all the comments guys! And yes I'm very competitive, playing sports all my life does that.

You did really good with this one. You finally took words and made them rhyme without forcing them to. I really love the first two stanzas those were the best. keep writing like this and you'll go very far. As always keep writing!

An excellent little ditty. Everything flowed smoothly and reminded me of "Everything you can do, I can do better."

Thanks for all the positive crits! I dont get those very much in poetry.

What? Galerius, you didn't tear my work apart at all this time.... ITs like there is something missing. *faints* Just kidding.

-laughs- That was great. Favorite part: "until it's bearable."
This really made me think about how I fight with myself when I write poetry, but it made me take a step back and see the humor in it. (:

Kaylyn wrote:What? Galerius, you didn't tear my work apart at all this time.... ITs like there is something missing. *faints* Just kidding.

Hmm, I'm not in the mood, but that is a good idea...