I love you

The love felt for you in my heart is strong
And I must be strong
Fro when you are gone.

I look back from the reflective glass
And see you goodness
Which stares back at me.

I know the same blood in your veins flows in mine
And I give my thanks
For such a gift.

To know that your power and grace is a part of me
Gives me such joy
I wish that you knew.

I will always and forever love you
Goodbye my grandma
I love you.

I just gave this a really thorough review and I accidentally click over on the next button and lost it all,


But anyway, check this site out : http://www.poemofquotes.com/articles/poetry-basics.php

It should help in making your non -flowing/emotion feelings there.

It was a good review i did, I just don't want to do it all over again. so just check that site out.


You need help with your flow and emotion, they weren't there.

Also shorten those first lines, they were way too long.


---Jon---

This is really good, its obviously about our grandma. so i think that i agree with the first commenter and some of your lines are too long . but other then that great job