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I love you? Yea right!

Rawr? · 2008-10-24T01:11:47Z

You tell me you love me. I say you lie.. You question my answer. And i start to cry. You pull me close. And i rip away. You ask when i will for give you. I say "obviously not today" You look at me with hurt. But I know that its a fake. Because the tables finally turn when your heart is put at stake. You try to say your sorry, And that you hurt me with your love. I say your just a liar. A reject from above. I thought you were so special. But clearly I was blind. I only saw the outer shell never cared for whats behind. I should have listen to my friends. I should have stayed away. I should have saved my loving heart for someone i knew would stay. You look at me with eyes so bleak. Then you turned to her and kiss her cheek. Your heart is now to stone to me. But when it comes to her shes a special as can be. I don't understand what i did. Where I made my mistake. But clearly it was something big. Because it caused my heart to fall and break. I'm that girl that steps aside. The one that has feelings to hide. I put on my mask. And I smile everyday. Hope, praying, wishing that this pain will go away. You couldn't make your choice. And this is what i get. For shedding tears that didn't matter. And meeting you my biggest regret. I wish I could believe you when you say you love me so. But how i can believe a liar someone that stooped so low. I hope she makes you happy. And puts a smile on your face. With my heart slowly stopping its perfect steady pace. Shes probably that someone special. That one that's there to stay. That one that wont quit fighting and never go away. I remember when i was her. The one that worshiped at your feet. But now its time for her to shine. And me to take my seat. I hate her because I'm jealous. Because its her not me. That is making you smile. And feeling we are meant to be. But here is where its over. The book is finally done. Another chapter in my life. With a battle never won.

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Sat Dec 06, 2008 2:56 pm

HarlequinJester says... · Sat Dec 06, 2008 2:56 pm

Judging by this, I think she at least knows hurt. I'm thirteen too, and I'm not a poet at all.. So, I have to say this: THAT WAS FANTASTICLY GREAT!

Twilight: Real men don't sparkle.

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Sat Dec 06, 2008 8:40 pm

Rawr? says... · Sat Dec 06, 2008 8:40 pm

HarlequinJester- Thank you so much!

Giving up doesnt always mean you are weak, sometimes it just mena youre strong enough to let go. <3

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Mon Dec 08, 2008 4:07 am

stupidiot92 says... · Mon Dec 08, 2008 4:07 am

this is the third piece of poetry ive read by you and it is amazing just like the others i wish i had the ability to shoot poems off like this but ive made one good one...

one suggestion break it into stanzas it makes it more pleasing to the eye

It doesn't think, doesn't feel.
It doesn't laugh or cry.
All it does from dusk 'till dawn
is make the soldiers die

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Mon Dec 08, 2008 4:17 am

Rawr? says... · Mon Dec 08, 2008 4:17 am

Thanks and will do.
Ill fix it when I have more time.

Giving up doesnt always mean you are weak, sometimes it just mena youre strong enough to let go. <3

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Mon Dec 08, 2008 6:52 pm

GAM says... · Mon Dec 08, 2008 6:52 pm

This is a beautiful poem with a very bright concept
There are some spelling errors
However no poem can be perfect
Looking forward to reading more from you

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The very worst use of time is to do very well what need not be done at all.
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