Me first poem, side note it needs more give me ideas!

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Tagging in the District.
Waiting for assistance.
Police Cars in the Distance.
Tagging in the District.

It me first attempt don't laugh
We get off to the rhythm of the trigger and destruction. Fallujah to New Orleans with impunity to kill. We are the hidden fist of the free market.
We are the ink, we are the quill.
[The Ink And The Quill (Be Afraid) - Anti-Flag]




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Honesly i dont' really understand anything at all...




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Same here. Not sure what the point of this was.
Please, sit down before you fall down.
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I think (though don't taken my word as law) that it's to do with graffiti.

I suck at poetry, so I can't give you any ideas though.
I wrote the above just for you.




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I think it's cool but it's not really a poem. Maybe a chorus or a beginning or something. At this point it's not really clear what it's about but it sounds good and if you expanded on it I bet it would be good.
Siempre, siempre: jardin de mi agonia,
tu cuerpo fugitivo para siempre,
la sangre de tus venas en mi boca,
tu boca ya sin luz para mi muerte.

-From 'Del amor imprevisto', Federico Garcia Lorca



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