Perfection

I wrote this when I was going through some hard times during school. I wrote a lot of poems during this time, and all of my friends think this was the best one. I hope you enjoy.


Everyone thinks I'm perfect
my eyes are filling with tears
I'm getting so tired
of all of those leers

Everyone comes to me
with a whole bunch of questions
I can't answer them all
because I'm not a perfection

Then they all get mad at me
they put their hands in my face
I cry and cry
because I can't take
all this pressure in this place

Why won't they listen
to a word I say
I'm not a perfection
in any kind of way

Hard times are only making us stronger. Don't put your hands up! Just believe in yourself, and you'll be able to conquer whatever you want! And to cry is fine... It always helps. About others, don't pay much attention to them, concentrate on what's good for you, reach it first, and only then move forward helping others.

About the poem:
It's actually very good, and I enjoyed it. However, in my opinion, there's a bit lack of rhythm and rhyme in the second part. My suggestion is maybe it'll better if you change something? Another thing, maybe adding punctuation will improve it, don't you think?
Liked though very much the poem itself. Catchy, clear, easy to read. Well done =).


Aust.

Hmm

I agree with the previous comment, kinda reminds me of one my styles!

"Then they all get mad at me

they put their hands in my face

I cry and cry

because I can't take

all this pressure in this place
"

I enjoyed reading this piece of yours keep it up!

Thank you! Sometimes, these poems are the only things that kept me from losing it. Thank you again!

i hate the word "perfect", just hate it...

you know, i've learned that bad can be also good, it just depends on the way you look at it...
: ]]

a beautiful song, it reallly is.

i wish you a nice week ^_^

Very nice short rhyming poetry..

Love it and keep it up please thanks

awww. I like this one too! Although I'm not so sure what leers means but still........good job. I like your poems. You make me feel like a wanna be. haha

what's the best thing about this poem is that it's real. your words don't seem to be fabricated after 3 hours of deep thought. It sounds like you just write down whatever you feel. good job on that.

hey there!
I completely get you... The friends at school, that expect you to resolve their problems give advise and to you never hurt and have always a smile on your face? I have lots of those!
LOL Sadness can only prove that there's happier things in life, or something like that.
So, this is supposed to be a review not a chat.
So, on to the review!
I loved it! That's all I have to say -_-'
LOL it's really good
Keep on the good work!

I like the concept of this and the fact that it's your own feelings, did poetry help you through your hard times?

Overall, this was really good, i liked how it wasn't overdone with long vocabularly and complex poetic devices, it made it more real and easy to relate to as a reader.

I personally don't think that the third stanza flows as well as the others, but that might just be me!

good work



-Helen x