Hahahaha! This has a bright Dr. S. feel to it! Beautiful rhyming! Very entertaining, didn't make me at all bored! I hope it won in that competition because it truly is unique! Keep writing! I can't wait to read what else you come up with!
-Butterfinger!
If you want to be a great writer, don't think about what you're going to write, just write it.
I'm a huge fan of writers block! When your brain halts, with no direction for where you should go, it gives you threads. All you have to do is pull and unravel the story you're meant to write.
This poem made me laugh because a few days ago, for Valentine's Day, I was trying to rhyme a word with purple and had no luck. I have reciently found a website that assists with rhyming... http://www.rhymezone.com/
I really liked the way this poem flowed. The one thing I would suggest is changing "fluple" to "flurple". I would also like to read more of your work! Keep it up -Kayde
"Sisters don't need words. They have perfected a language of snarls and smiles and frowns and winks - expressions of shocked surprise and incredulity and disbelief. Sniffs and snorts and gasps and sighs - that can undermine any tale you're telling." ~Pam Brown
Haha! I loved it! I am a big fan of Dr. Seuss myself so I liked the lightheartedness of the poem. I agree with Kayde2 as well; the word "fluple" stuck out to me as well. That, I think, is my only suggestion other than to keep on writing. I hope you won the competition! The poem kept reminding me of my own plight, trying to rhyme something with "orange". It's said that nothing rhymes with that word either but after some hard thought, I came up with "door hinge." Alas, no one really cares about the color orange so my search was in vain.
P.S. I think "curdle" might rhyme as well...Maybe.
nothing rhymes with purple, is in fact, untrue. i believe a "hurple" is some form of riding equipment aha xD (in response to Luvsi, i do people that's assonant as opposed to rhyming )
i love your nice little rhyming scheme, it's pretty safe a traditional, but it still works so long as you measure your syllables correctly, which you have.
i can't help but feel like is something of an ode to Dr. Suess...perhaps if you changed your last line, mention other writers, it might feel more like a poem about nothing rhyming with purple, as opposed to "all praise Dr. Suess", forgive me if that sounded harsh.
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