Nothing Rhymes With Purple

This is a poem I wrote of a creative writing competition. First poem I've written in years, so please be nice .

Nothing rhymes with purple

Oh, nothing rhymes with purple,
Lament, for it is true,
Who indeed would take the time, to rhyme,
With colours such as blue?

Dr Seuss could rhyme with purple,
His literacy master plan,
Was rhyme purple using fluple,
And other words unknown to man.

But alas, for he’s not with us now,
Purple rhyming’s moved on too,
I know y’all care, but don’t despair,
Rhyming will, indeed, get through.

We can try to rhyme with purple,
Keep alive this rhyming craze,
Don’t let it die, you have to try,
You may well be amazed!

They say nothing rhymes with purple,
But we know now that’s not true,
But who’d “waste” the time, on such a rhyme?
Dr Seuss, that’s who!

lol. I loved your poem. know i willl be obsesses with finding a rhyme with purple now... anyway great flow and i thought it was a very clever poem. i didn't see any grammar mistakes on this poem so you did a great job there. Great job, good luck, and keep up the great writing!

Love the poem! (but Circle rhymes with purple)

OMG it does :O, but don't tell anyone!

thanks for the positive responses!

That was cute! it had a nice flow and consistent beat. I liked how there was a twist and fuse of Dr. Seuss in the Purple poem. It's seems to me it's a basic catchy funny rhyming poem on purple, how nothing rhymes with it and only Dr.S would even try. Nice!

-"If this saying did not exist, someone would have invented it."

This is an enjoyable poem indeed.

The title caught my interest and good going Oct Girl with circle!!

You have a fresh style, very light-hearted yet appealing. It's a break from the mundane mourning poems about life, so kudos to the originality of your theme!

Oh, do put the title in Sentence Case please, otherwise no major defects in this piece.

Ah, great. I really liked this. This was perfect for the mood I am now, which is tired, haha. But I know I would've liked this even though I wasn't tired at all.

Sohini really said it all.

I saw the title as a random piece when I was posting a review, and it indeed caught my eye. I had to go find it again, though, because when I'd posted the review, the random piece had already changed.

Good work, I want to see more by you!

And oh, welcome to YWS!


Demeter xxx

wow. wow. this was really great, really original. the only thing i would change maybe is when you say

"his literacy master plan"

it seems kind of weird, and i'm not sure what that means, so i would suggest:

"his literary master plan"

anyway, it doesn't really matter, just a humble opinion.

I absolutely loved it!!! and on top of that it is pretty true.

I never thought of trying to rhyme purple with anything. This poem is so true. I liked it. Keep writing!

nice poem

I must say, I really love this poem! It made me laugh and realise that nothing actually does rhyme with purple! Except for circle, well done for finding that! I found no mistakes in grammar or spellings, and thought that it ran very smoothly.

loved it. Can't find any faults either. Just goes to show you shouldn't give up, it took you what, two years to get this on featured works?

keep up the writing

~ Tinkem

Haha, nice! I love your poem. xD I love the 'happy' and carefree emotion it has. It might as well be a children's poem. I hope you win the competition.

I've got some nitpicks for you by the way :

Who indeed would take the time, to rhyme,

- I don't think there should be any commas here.

Dr Seuss could rhyme with purple,

- There should be a period after 'Dr'. Same goes with the other 'Dr Seusses' in this poem.

But we know now that’s not true,

- Put a comma after 'But'.

And, whoah at October Girl's comment! I was still trying to find a sensible rhyme for purple when I read her post lol.

This is odd, I don't normally critique poetry. Oh well!

Oh, nothing rhymes with purple,
Lament, for it is true,
Who indeed would take the time, to rhyme,
With colours such as blue? This does not make sense. What you are saying is "Nobody wants to take their time to rhyme with blue." Why blue? How about, "Who indeed would take the time, to rhyme/When other colors call you." or something like that. I really suck with poetry.

Dr Seuss could rhyme with purple,
His literacy master plan, I agree with Mars for this part
Was rhyme purple using fluple, "Flurple" would be a better choice
And other words unknown to man.

...

They say nothing rhymes with purple,
But we know now that’s not true,
But who’d “waste” the time, on such a rhyme? Why is 'waste' put in quotation marks?
Dr Seuss, that’s who! This is a twist... albeit an anticlimactic one. I really don't think it's the best sort of line to end the poem with, but I couldn't come up with a better one.

So, that's my critique. I left two parts out because I liked them just the way they were.
Very funny!
Jenth