Confusion~song

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Confusion~song:


What can I say?
Everything I feel and think
Just blows away.

Like the leaves
That fall in August:
Spinning, coppery sheaves.

My confidence; fleeting
A feather shed
From the eagle’s wing.

I plunge
into azure waters
Of confusion.

Absorbing all doubt,
I float for a while,
Attempting to sort this out.


What do I feel?
Is this emotion-
Even real?

Are my impressions imagined,
Or do I
Have myself pinned?

I find solace
In the thought that
For either answer,
There is another question.
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How was it? Please let me know. :)




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Hey!!
Ok AWESOME poem!! Just one really tiny thing, commas.
Use tons! After some of the lines I noticed u didn't have a lot of punctuation. Totally fine, I'm just saying, maybe you want to add a little more commas or something.
Other then that, I loved it!
Great job :)
~M
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~Molly and Jake~




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Thanks. I'm not so good at the punctuation thing, but I'll work on it. :D



sometimes you just have to cry over spilled milk, and that is okay
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